First Love

You were my first love

My first kiss

An angel sent from above

A memory of pure bliss

You were my first fight

And my first tears

My bright light

And my perfect years

You were my first heartbreak

My first breakdown

My best mistake

And my shinning crown

You were my first love

But not my last

You were my white dove

But you’re in the past

Reviews

[emipoemi]

.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

[Evelynn]

I agree that replacing "but" with "now" would add more power. I chose but because of the fact that it's not powerful. The final line is more of a release, a "I have to to do this, I don't want to, but I must," rather than a "I can do this, I'm doing this" If that makes sense.

[emipoemi]

Normally with the last line, you want to be as powerful as possible.....but now that I read it again, I don't recall the line "but not my last" being written that way.....My comment was made 5 months ago (wow!), and I honestly have no idea what I meant exactly in saying that. For the two "But"'s are actually good sound-wise, and I understand what you're saying regarding the "release". Keep it the way it is. The poem is fantastic overall. My opinion on it doesn't change a bit.

[Evelynn]

Thanks! Sorry it took me so long to reply( I mean 5 months), I was and then I had to do something and I completely forgot. And thank you again. :)

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Chris]

Memories... relatable and thought-full.

[Faith Knoll]

The last four lines blew me away! Wow. Keep writing, girl! Beautiful

[Avia]

Aww. I particularly like the last line. I think it's something people can relate to and think about when we have had something like this in our lives. Nice work

[Evelynn]

Thanks, Avia. That means so much!

[Avia]

You're welcome :)