First Love

You were my first love

My first kiss

An angel sent from above

A memory of pure bliss

You were my first fight

And my first tears

My bright light

And my perfect years

You were my first heartbreak

My first breakdown

My best mistake

And my shinning crown

You were my first love

But not my last

You were my white dove

But you’re in the past

Reviews

[emipoemi]

.......wow.......I'm having a hard time to say any more......wow.......

If I may make a small suggestion: replacing "but" in the final line with "now" adds for more power. I strongly suggest you consider that. Other than that, this is beautiful. Well done!

[Evelynn]

I agree that replacing "but" with "now" would add more power. I chose but because of the fact that it's not powerful. The final line is more of a release, a "I have to to do this, I don't want to, but I must," rather than a "I can do this, I'm doing this" If that makes sense.

[emipoemi]

Normally with the last line, you want to be as powerful as possible.....but now that I read it again, I don't recall the line "but not my last" being written that way.....My comment was made 5 months ago (wow!), and I honestly have no idea what I meant exactly in saying that. For the two "But"'s are actually good sound-wise, and I understand what you're saying regarding the "release". Keep it the way it is. The poem is fantastic overall. My opinion on it doesn't change a bit.

[Evelynn]

Thanks! Sorry it took me so long to reply( I mean 5 months), I was and then I had to do something and I completely forgot. And thank you again. :)

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes, we never forget our first love. Become more sweeter with time and distance. Thank you Evelynn for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Evelynn]

Thank you Coyote for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Evelynn.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoy the simplicity of your work. First loves are usually dedications of ignorance or innocence and sometimes both. I laugh to hear people say they'd like to "fall in love". In my mind, love is hard work, responsibility and sacrifice. And I don't hear of many folks standing in line to offer those things freely. And love has to be free or it isn't love at all...it's just a trade. I told my brother I was going to have tee shirts printed with that slogan: Love is: Hard Work, Responsibility and Sacrifice. He advised me that I'd not be able to sell many and almost none to the "under fifty" crowd. I guess it's a thing we all must learn in time.

[Evelynn]

Thanks. And you're right love is hard work. No matter how many times you've been in love, it doesn't get easier, not really.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I can honestly say I've loved many people through the years but never stopped loving any of them...even the ones I've lost. The loss is the hardest thing to bear. I don't think it's meant to be easy...but it can be rewarding. Still amazed by by the love I have received in my own life...every day.

[Evelynn]

I don't think that after loving someone, you can just stop loving them, no matter how long it was. While, i think, after a while, you'll stop feeling as much heartache, you will still love them.

[Vicky]

I truly LOVED it. I'm a songwriter and I immediately thought of a beat when reading it. I give it a 99

[SoakedPoet]

this is great.. it captures the fondness for recollecting a chapter in someones life.. I wish I could be as positive about myself like that.. you sound so free of regret

[J. J. Nightingale]

An easy read...
Heartfelt Memories..

J.J.

[pia]

This was so sweet!!
You expressed the feeling of first love and a first heartbreak so beautifully!!!
Your poem touched my heart !!

[Brigg Aries]

Its good that I see no grudges between the lines. Just memories we'd all remember from a first love. nice one ^^

[Traci]

Bittersweet memories. The ambiance of emotion you create envelopes the reader, as we all look back on our "first".

[Weeping willow]

Wonderful memories flowing through your words.First loves are the hardest to forget;-]