Doggy-Paddling

For Devon's Picture This contest; my first entry

No one would have known

It was our secret place

I didn't mean for this to happen

I told you to bring a jacket

You knew it was cold

But you didn't

The boards were old, rotting

It had been raining

It's called caution tape for a reason

I heard the snap

But I didn't think it through

Then I heard the splash

A gaping hole

It almost ate me too

You never told me

That you couldn't swim

I'd always just assumed

Author's Note

Short, but final.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

It is straightforward,sharp and precise..There is a cool,nonchalance in your voice here which makes it an interesting read..a short narrative,a snapshot out of what could be an entire novel..

[Devons]

The romance of a death trap... Simple; short sharp shock in plain words, and the abruptness of death itself is almost cut off.. I like the subtle rhyming style of this piece, and especially in that ending.