Blissful Dreams

Simple wishes
Stolen dreams are upon us
Life is crumbling before me

Walls crashing down
Powder covering lost beings
Disintegrated hope

A hand reaches forth
Hold on tight to me
I might slip between the cracks....again

Flowing from my breath
Secrets never to meant to be
Veil drawn

Wedding gown dances alone
Hatred colored pink
The cards shuffled and dealt

Come to my picnic
Drink my lemonade
Feel the soft blades of untamed grass

Find me in my bathtub
Beneath the bubbles
Smiling

Author's Note

I really love the format on this one. This piece has meaning that only truly I know. I would be extremely pleased to hear your take on it though.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

I would like it much more if it had an intrinsic rhyme

[Cynthia]

I love the format of this poem too!
Love this so.

[Coyote Poetry]

I could get many meanings from this poem. Begin with dream and hope lost. Then being saved and feeling some fear. Then a celebration of a sort. A peaceful ending in a tub with bubbles smiling. A excellent poem. You create many visions.
Coyote

[Jonathan De Elvira]

great....
I liked the line "hatred colored pink" though....

sounds like you're flirting with your negative side in that line...
overall, this was deep and hold meanings...

[Chaos Complex]

I love it. There's a lot of great lines in this piece. I also like the format and your use of colored font. I know it's a small detail, but the colors make it more lively in my opinion. Great job and thanks for sharing.

[Iris Jayne]

I find it sweet, though the sweetness was fragmented--like, you know, every stanza was a separate poem. I still liked it though, it had me thinking what could possibly be in your mind that drove you to write this--experience? belief? personal observations?--and if I also will feel the same way about those in case I knew. Great write, the format sure added up(:

[nono]

I like this I used that same pic for "It seems you both forgot" This is beautiful I thank you so much for your share!! It has me thinking!!!!!

[deeps]

Wedding gown dances alone
Hatred colored pink
The cards shuffled and dealt

I throughly enjoyed this stanza,
This is a wonderful write.
Love the format myself.
A write very well done!