Blissful Dreams

Simple wishes
Stolen dreams are upon us
Life is crumbling before me

Walls crashing down
Powder covering lost beings
Disintegrated hope

A hand reaches forth
Hold on tight to me
I might slip between the cracks....again

Flowing from my breath
Secrets never to meant to be
Veil drawn

Wedding gown dances alone
Hatred colored pink
The cards shuffled and dealt

Come to my picnic
Drink my lemonade
Feel the soft blades of untamed grass

Find me in my bathtub
Beneath the bubbles
Smiling

Author's Note

I really love the format on this one. This piece has meaning that only truly I know. I would be extremely pleased to hear your take on it though.

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

Its nice to be able to have a piece of writing swallow you whole and have it take you somewhere peaceful. I can feel the sense of security that lingers on the tips of the sentences, and the warmth that wraps it all together in the final lines. Thank you so very much for the write. :)

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

Trust your instinct and you shall never stray to those "powder covered lost beings" Relax and let the cards be played. There is alot of color in your visuals, alot of comforts as well.. You were def in the zone here.

[Bubo]

I love the colours, and am reminded of a woman deeply let down who ends her life, perhaps escaping where things cannot hurt, life continues around her, untamed........very intriguing.

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

I really liked this, made me tap my noggin and say "hmm..." for a sec after I read it. :) It has a bit of spite in it, definitely, and I think that's what made it so enjoyable. I liked the color usage too, it seems to enhance the imagery even more, but you've done a wonderful job with the imagery even without the colors! Good write!

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. hmmm ... it's a bit of a riddle i'm certain ... but i do wanna share the vibe of this one with you ... the presentation is awesome ... the words and images flow beautifully ... i get a whiff of sarcasm ... it seems like someone's getting married to someone but not out of choice ... unless that's a metaphor for simply hooking up with something that one is not convinced about or one is compelled to ... then my interpretation gets a bit personalized ... and i realize ... that it's that feeling of losing everything to a whole lot of people ... and watching from a distance ... that feeling of being utilized but not treasured ... followed by a sense of triumph ... at successfully enjoying a hot bath ... and contemplating about how one successfully managed to keep oneself a secret from everyone ... something like that ... it's a pretty beautifully bizarre write ... very trippy ... hope you're not gonna kill me for my review ... even if it's way off the mark ... :) ...

[M.Kilani]

smiling while being lost in hopelessness, coloring words and worlds is the true strength that many lack, hands reaching forth while life pulls back, a true struggle that has to be lived.
amazing piece; colorful and insightful as well .
well done

[Jeff Bresee]

Easy to read, light, fun (colored words and colorful thoughts) and best of all, endless meanings for all who read. Well done.

[R E Tree]

This poem is powerful. I adore the line "Powder covering lost beings" it gives me a strong image and it makes it less difficult for me to visulise the rest of the imagery in your poem. Such as walls crushing down. You have used words that are remarkable. I will always remember this piece it has been a pleasure to read. It gives me the feeling of change. Things are getting destroyed and becoming new again.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

a good poem....very symbolic lines, nice work!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

your format imbues the movement of the stanzas with eloquent grace~ the words sketch out the visuals in gorgeous haunting array~soft melancholy travels the poem's spine~ beauty and a chill combined~