Vengeance

Vengeance

A Poem by EverEmma

Darkness fades
Forever has no beauty
Endless 

Words written in blood
Drip down the stem of life
Glimmer in the moonlight

I fly
Into the unforgiving night
Silver beacons rain down on me

A wrinkle in time
Love has no price
Charming malice

Misty daylight
Unknown dreams
Vengeance 

© 2010 EverEmma


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EverEmma
Please be brutally honest but not disrespectful

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Quite the captivating imagery you create here. The poem is a bit abstract, which is good. Haven't seen a lot of those these days!

I really like the expression "A wrinkle in time". The shadowy descriptions are quite consistent, and help create a grim atmosphere.

"Words written in blood
Drips down the stem of life
Glimmers in the moonlight"
The stanza is good. But I think you should change the second and third lines to "Drip down the stem of life", and "Glimmer in the moonlight".

Great imagery, great poem.
Loved reading it!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Words written in blood
Drips down the stem of life
Glimmers in the moonlight

Love these words here,
This is a very well written write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really good:) I like it a lot hon
The tension is used well here and the word usage is great!
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


Absolutely lovely! :))

Posted 14 Years Ago


The others are right-your word choice is truly amazing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Mia
Great word choice! I felt like I was being sucked into a world of this poem. This would make a great prologue for a short story or one shot, I think you could go a lot of different ways from here. This was an amazing poem, again, the word choice really do create an image, and since they're so descriptive you really feel like you're not just reading the poem, but you're actually a part of it. I also like how you put the title as the last word of the poem, I think it is common, but I enjoyed it very much. I would love to see this as a prologue!


Keep writing!,
Mia

Posted 14 Years Ago


This a wonderfully written. I felt like this was from the viewpoint of something that prefers the night, over the daylight. Somehow, night held a certain beauty to it, while when the sun comes, it only offers the diffused light through gray and misting clouds.

I liked it! The word choices were very helpful in creating vivid images in each stanza.

Great Ink!
Wolfie


Posted 14 Years Ago



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