Rewind

 

A fragment of memory.

History thrown off its linear groove,

a moment to notice without noticing.

 

Interest will scatter,

focus dissolves the fragile matter—

sand on fast forward.

 

Yet for one slippery second,

energy replays.

Reviews

[Kenji Light]

This is a very interesting piece. The concept of memory function is certainly an interesting topic. I like your take on a small bit of memory, a minor scene that has some great unnoticed importance. My favorite line is "History thrown off its linear groove." You have great use of imagery in this piece such as the movement of sand, which is obviously an hourglass reference. Good write.

[Mary E. Green]

I'm not a great reviewer. I either like something or I don't so I'm just going to say,
I like this. It took me a couple reads to really get into it but it's very good.

[kaotix]

Thats great...if you can draw a chill from me then it must be excellente...totally felt what you were implying.

[Raef C. Boylan]

This took a few reads for me to appreciate how brilliant it is; I liked it straight off, but struggled to get inside it. Now I have, I'm liking it even more, and admiring your deft capture of these incidents.

"focus dissolves the fragile matter" - how true and aptly expressed; the more we try to regain hold on a memory, faint and darting, the more it crumbles apart until it's gone.

Every word is perfect.
Great piece.

Thanks for writing and posting this.
I think a true sign of poetic skill is being able to create a beautiful piece that is short (in length, but not shallow in depth)...like you've done here.

[Emily B]

Oh, wow! A light touch conveys the message very well!

[The Elder Pine]

Hmm, a very interesting oiece that causes the reader to ponder aspects of life normaly un-touched during the course of a regular day. Thank you for sharing.

[Rod Zinkel]

I like the rhythm of this and She Breathes, reads well aloud.