Careful Spectre

My passing attempt at a pantoum

We really didn’t want him there
a lone man walking in the shadows
a face so cruel, so solitude
we didn’t think he’d come for us

a lone man walking in the shadows
but in his hand he carried hope
we didn’t think he’d come for us
upon this path of our salvation

but in his hand he carried hope
a Trojan horse for all to share
upon this path of our salvation
we broke his bread and ate his flesh

a Trojan horse for all to share
we really couldn’t stand him there
we broke his bread and ate his flesh
his face was bare his breath like wine.

Reviews

[Arriah]

This is beautiful, & so true, also. It's a wonderful description of our sin, Jesus' life on Earth, & what lead up to the crucifixion. I love it. :)

[Samuel Dickens]

I'm not sure if the man walking in shadows is the one from Nazareth or someone/something else, but mystery surrounds him and his gift. Just like real life, I'd say.

[Eudaimoniac]

I think the indirect allusion to the Christ figure here was a way for me to contrast an idea that is common to us with a strange kind of unexpected contingency. Glad you connected with the mystery Sam.