A Disadvantage

a poem about how those born with challenges are the ones that will truly amount to something

Disadvantage
The true advantage
For those without the upper hand 
Are the ones truly strong
Not saying the rich cant be as well
But how can any of them be strong compared to man who has survived hell
Trapped in a cell 
Of circumstances
That trances the mind
Desperately trying to find why me
What do you see
Why do this to me
And seem to elate with my dismay
Right now and every other day 
What do you get out of my sorrow 
What will you do to me tomorrow
So twisted so confused
And bruised 
A broken spirit
Wishing to hear it 
Words of salvation
Not just for him but his nation
The people that also feel pain
But those that succumb and go insane 
A man who can withstand pain
Can withstand anything
And everything 
Because what pain can be greater
Then the huge hole in
Your own heart

Author's Note

Again I'm crazy lol

Reviews

[C.]

You're not crazy. This was really good. I know so many people who just let their bad circumstances overcome them and they don't even try to be strong and get past it whether it be a life altering injury, or whether they are depressed or have an eating disorder, lots of things like that. It's really sad to see and I like how this poem expressed that sadness

[Erika Jones]

This reminds me of what everyone of us lives through. We, as writers, are filled with many challenges and none of us are given the credit we are supposed to be given.

[Brielle Cartny]

I love the message!

[Owlgirl]

Wow, great job, the vocabulary is amazing, the flow needs a tiny bit of work with the amount of syllables per line, but the rythm is good. Awesome poem.

[Robert delfuego or Ethan]

thank you for the review i get what you somewhat saying with the flow a bit but that's just kind of the way it was written i get how its slightly awkward but there was nothing forced into here