I realized that I was entirely to blame, Unlike the poor thing in front of me standing, I do not have roots to keep me exactly the same. I should not stand in one place forever, Who knows what the road tomorrow will bring, Run straightaway and try to discover, How again to be able to laugh, dance, sing. But instead, I wandered lonely as a cloud, Making my way through the sea of nothingness, Rambling everyday in constant pursuit, Of hopefully finding the right address.
excellent! hats off to the writer... to start with the flow of this piece is exceptionally smooth...and once again you have beautifully expressed the generally aggressive emotions in a subtle manner...loss of love always seems to leave us struck and moving on appears to be impossible..but once again the i can feel the writer trying to fight her way out of the dark alleys of heartache...
i am sure the right address wont take long to be found!
The very last line could have been worded perhaps a little better? The last word seems a little akward to me.
At any rate, I loved the poem, great symbolizism. Really appreciated it, I feel like Im taking something away form reading this, good job and thanks(:
~Kij
The poem is so good. Title brought me in. I like the logic of this poem. Your words tell a true story. We are to blame when we close the openings to celebrating being alive. I like the ending. Many powerful lines making the poem have purpose and reason.
"Who knows what the road tomorrow will bring,
Run straightaway and try to discover,
How again to be able to laugh, dance, sing."
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote
You were made perfectly to be loved - and surely I have loved you, in the idea of you, my whole life long. (Elizabeth Barrett Browning)
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