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      He held her there and she held her breath. For a minute, it seemed as though the vast universe had come to a halt. And in that moment, he saw cupped between his hands, the face of a woman so intricate, so delicate; weaved with such intensity and vibrancy that life itself would stare in awe at the work it had done. And he said:

      "Autumn, before I met you, I was a star; burning out and dying. I was just this fixed, luminous point in the sky and felt as though I had no work left to be done; no meaning. And then you appeared. Gravity had pulled you to me and I was amazed. I had searched for so long the light years of stars, hoping that I would find my equal, and you were right beside me the entire time. We touched and before I knew it, we were intertwining with such iridescent ferocity. And then we were one, forever connected into a perfect, stellar fusion.

      I will always love you because you drove into me and created an us. And that is why our love is so beautiful. It’s because there will always be an us and as we burn out, we burn out together.

Author's Note

This short story is rather... short. Nonetheless, I feel as though it catches the essence of an eternal love. If there are any grammatical/punctuation errors, feel free to throw those out there. Also, constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Bob Sherunkle]

Wow! That was beautiful. She is a very lucky woman,and your a very lucky guy.I really would like to be able to say something like this but i've been trod on so much,cant be a*** any more. Keep shining brightly,both of you.