Spider Veined Venus (word challenge poem)

The image for this poem would be a crone's hands folded in her lap, bones exposed. Or, mayhaps a sagging chin of the haggy harridan.

Faded is a state,

not of disrepair…

think of it as a slow vanishing.

No varnish for this once-lustrous thing.

Opaque

A painful, foot-dragging getaway.

 

Woman is the azure sky,

partly cloudy, chance of rain.

right…

Woman is a  Moon-mad screamer

…closer

 

At best and worst:

Woman is a Scarlet Spirit!

Over-thinker,

Deep-In-Calculus squinter

 

She's tainted with an envy that lasts through the grave.

This makes sense to any mortal prick:

Ever since Eve, woman has had a bone to pick.

 

Her age accelerates.

A hefty price paid with each shifty trap laid.

Oh, the devious plans set for man:

Essential oils

Mis-labeled medicines

Dreamy creamy perfumery

So merry in her apothecary

Fountain of youth or bust!

And what of Man ? - dim-witted, custom-fitted

in his pathetic pillories of lust.

Reviews

[shedevil]

u always amaze me

[NinjaPi]

It is nice. I like it. Wonderful use of imagery.

[roarke]

Yer a romantic kinda guy ain't cha?

I liked this piece. It says it all. Keep going with it, you started a the end with "man" and then maybe evolve it into the relationship?

more of an homage than a satire I'd say... lol.

[SpitfireGrrrl]

LOVE IT! "Ever since Eve, woman has had a bone to pick." This captures woman's aging in such a satiric awesome way. Funny, and true, and amazing. Definitely a new favorite!

[Siddhartha]

once a wordsmith...always a wordsmith!...humorous and hilarious....the ending is killer...

[Hollow Man]

appropiate and a flood of great language

[Thea Fuentebella]

loved the ending!
great choice of words and a unique scheme.
humorous, vivid and so ..so real XD
good write!

[Poetic Beauty]

Fountain of youth or bust is because we are made to feel as if we have to be perfect in order to keep the love of our life. I liked the idea of this poem and you used the words in creative way. Woman are complicated but because society tells us we have to be in order to keep everyone in our lives happy.