RUSHIN CAUSEMOENAUGHT (nawncents VERSE)

Trouble wants you,

bad.

An equation that just can’t be

had.

Eastern European man holds a secret, what do you

have?

A distraught thought; a fear the cat’s been let out the

bag.

The night nurse showed up but forget to bring his

badge.

Electronic components, do you know your Russian? Where do you

stand?

Interdepartmental suspects sent up an immediate

flag.

 

Check out time is 10:30pm, that’s always been the

case.

Maybe if we calibrate the cameras, we can get a look at his

face.

If the Russian Cosmonaut’s dead, then he’s naught; there’s no

trace.

Radiation treatment in the penthouse; coma ward could’t keep

pace.

The tinker-toys of scientific boys brought us to a new

stage.

Been thinking too linearly, making it difficult to give

chase.

After all the “oh no” and “don’t know” we somehow felt less

safe.

Reviews

[Dilan Gray]

I really like the word choice in this poem. You did really well with making everything rhyme. This was a clever poem. Great job.

[donella75]

the play on words is always nice to read

[kelly]

I enjoyed the somewhat disjointed musings. I feel that this could be a character smoking a cigarette outside of a hospital. A doctor or patient in the cancer ward allowing his mind to wander to the rigid precision of life. The frantic pursuit of topics that are beyond the mundane, although the mundane is well integrated into the poem.

[Jesi]

I really liked it :D i liked the starting of it most

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

My favorite type of writing! Simply brilliant.

[Siddhartha]

:)...Oh dude...the title messed up my mind but the poem got me hooked and by the time I reached the end I knew what the title meant...:)...But the write makes sense...About a really messed up Russian slaughterhouse(spaceship) and the underlying ironies...Really difficult too...Now was that really what I meant...:)
P.S.-A typo-"A distraught thought; a fear the cat’s been let out the
bag" should be"A distraught thought; a fear the cat’s been let out OF the
bag".

[Nobody.]

:) I like it.

[Meaghan]

While I was reading this, I couldn't help but think of Bob Dylan. I like this a lot.

[.]

like the structure, keeps the pace up really well..big brothers watching springs to mind..good stuff.

[Linear]

Thinking along straight lines wont help me see, but do we really need to! maybe just feel the tree, Loved the line tinker-toys of scientific boys, brilliant stuff