Moving on

Hello regret, nice to see you again.

I've been dragging this heart around like a dead friend. 

I tried to make a connection, 

But it was not legit, and I ended up with cold rejection. 

They could not be what I thought I could see. 

Reality did not live up to my fantasy. 

Pressure of a future made them slip away.

A little at first but more day by day. 

How could they be what I wanted to see 

When they just laid there dead, slowly killing me? 

I cannot survive while I carry this dead weight. 

The disappointment brings me down as I suffocate. 

So I will stay in this darkness that homes anxiety and pain

Until the day I am revived and ready to die again.

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

Like this poem. Just needs tidied up.

Hello regret nice to see you again,
I’ve been dragging this heart around like a dead friend.

I tried to make a connection,
But it was not legit and I ended up with cold rejection.

They could not be what I thought I could see,
Reality did not live up to my fantasy.

Pressure of a future made them slip away,
A little at first but more day by day.

How could they be what I wanted to see,
When they just lay there dead, slowly killing me.

I cannot survive while I carry this dead weight,
The disappointment brings me down as I suffocate.

So I will stay in this darkness that homes anxiety and pain,
Until the day I am revived and ready to die again.

[Escribe]

I'm always looking for feedback. How do you suggest I tidy it up? Thanks in advance!

[Paul Bell]

I tidied it up for you. lol

[Escribe]

Oh sorry I didn't notice lol thanks

[KCthelastboyscout]

Interesting to read.pain and disappointment are the underlying theme to this story. Well structured well written.well done

[SZHZIA]

A poem filled with sadness, pain and emotoins. The poem tried to search a new way to be live.
I love the following lines,
"So I will stay in this darkness that homes anxiety and pain,
Until the day I am revived and ready to die again."

Best
Szhzia