Thunder, One and Two.

It might be called love.

I.

What bittersweet romance!

I had never known love to be so great.

With a tongue of cynicism, I would lash

like a snake at its prey.

And then the lightning struck one night

and warmed me up, ablaze;

straight down to the soul of me

it crackled through the haze.

A bittersweet romance,

for thunder cross oceans goes,

from the heart of he to that of me 

but it can't take us home.

II.

 - actually, the pain's in the gut.

no appetite, forced chuckle -

acid growls like a machine.

that noisy muscle!

But there is no true pain in that fist that

BOOMS

like thunder behind your ribs between the lungs

your heart it beats forever.

January 11 & April 12, 2010

Author's Note

Being 16 was no fun at all.

Reviews

[plainme]

this is great, this is really great. I love how there are two parts to this, written in different times, perhaps different circumstances and yet they blend together really well. I think my interpretation of this poem is pretty different from what your desired message is, but that's the wonder of poetry, so many sides, so few words. Well done, Sarah. Again, you blow me away.

[Sarah Khalil]

Thank you :) Although I just realized I accidentally put the year as 2013 - they were written in 2010! Always love your reviews, plainme.

[plainme]

Sarah, as always, the pleasure is all mine!

[Shaun Payton]

Thunder is a good metaphor..a really loud boom can shake you. Fine fine writing

[Sarah Khalil]

Thunder is just great to use as imagery and the word itself has a great ring to it XD Thanks for reading!

[Shaun Payton]

Thunder rules! its lightning im afraid of:)

[Keith]

Sometimes a realisation we need to change can hit like thunder, hopefully not too late.

[Sarah Khalil]

Ain't it the truth! Thanks for reviewing! :)

[Donovan "Grey Wolf" Go..]

Wow that's really great, keep up the good work.

[Sarah Khalil]

Thank you :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Good metaphor with the thunder. Great job

[Sarah Khalil]

Thunder remains one of my favorite images in my writing. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

[quinfinn]

the thunder metaphor herein is excellent. i am very impressed by your writing style. thank you so much for our new friendship!

[Sarah Khalil]

That's an enormous compliment, thank you so, so much quin! :) I appreciate it.

[quinfinn]

always welcome....

[SyberRose]

Love is quite torturous sometimes...can feel like a butterfly in the stomach or a dagger in the heart...we have all felt both...enjoyed the read dear...hugs

[Sarah Khalil]

Thank you Rose, glad you enjoyed it :)