Yes You Are (My Inspiration) [Part1]

My first poem here.

Yes You Are (My Inspiration)

Epilogue ErrSix

 

  

Last time, the notes were all blurred; I am hidden on my shelf

Maybe that’s why I had no friends rather than myself

I tried to fix things; I tried to be open to others

But that being open helps me to go back; being one of those loners.

 

 

I wrote some stories and poetry to make myself entertained

But I am not entertained; but I felt that I am trained

I accidentally wrote a story out of my anger

I showed my work to others, knowing that there is no danger.

 

 

But there is someone who told me that I should love poetry.

She is a girl who came out from the dark, I knew her lately.

She’s dressed in white, gave me a sheet of paper.

I’ve read her creation and was struck by her.

 

 

At first, I don’t want to do and say these things to thee.

Because of you, all the poetry in the world finally makes sense to me

And for the first time, I’m proud to tell to the nation;

You are, yes you are, my inspiration!

Author's Note

Any grammar problems or suggestions?

Reviews

[Enthusiast]

Dear Epilogue ErrSix,

Thank you for submitting your poem here.

I personally found the first verse cumbersome, hard to read and jumbled, but I really quite enjoyed the rest of it. The last few verses are a much easier read. This being said, I acknowledge a purposeful use of this technique (staccato to easy-flowing writing) as a way to set the poem's pace. One needs to be careful though that the reader does not put the poem down altogether whilst reading the first verse.

It is quite a gift is someone helps you discover poetry as a form of self-expression and art. And if moreover that same person teaches you some of the emotions that will allow you to understand poetry written by others, it's no wonder she becomes your muse.

Keep up the good work.

[Epilogue ErrSix]

This is a poem made for my first entry to our local school paper, to let them hire me as a Literary Editor.

This is also a "sequel" to a friend's poem (I dunno if she will allow me to post it here)