I want to take you (Love poem #4)

love poetry

I want to take you

 to all the places
  you dreamt of going

Side by side
 the view shimmering
  the wind blowing

 

to hold your hand in mine
like this, for the rest of time

 

I want to give you
 all that shines and glitters
  endless surprises

I want to hold you
 our arms intertwined;
  eternal sunrises

without words or thoughts, just bliss
to be like this: my wish, my wish

Author's Note

hey guys. i just had a psychotic episode! i will try to get back to everyone very soon, but i just need a few days to recover. here's a love poem i wrote a while ago.

Reviews

[Lorry]

A pretty darn good way to wake up (the poem, not the episode)
That leaves me thinking that no matter how cold the day is, it might just be filled with sunshine.
Hope you feel better now.... I don't believe in all that get well soon, so get well now!
😃

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Lorry. reading these comments have been very encouraging. appreciate your support always.
read morethanks Lorry. reading these comments have been very encouraging. appreciate your support always.

Ern.

[Ken Simm.]

Yes, just yes. A beautiful poem on the beauty of love.

[Re-Pete]

quite sweet. touching to say the least. love is not an easy thing to express and talk about.

[Aarti Sriram]

Sure receipe and attitude, a lover would want in a relationship. This is almost what a lover will need from their partner. Good luck and glittery times : ) dear @ Ern

[John the Baptist]

Sounds like something meant for a special person. A lot of feeling skillfully conveyed. Best wishes for your recovery. Those diseases are very troublesome, but in my working days I knew many people who dealt with them successfully.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks John. glad you stopped by. i am doing a bit better, thanks for asking. took a few days off but im getting back into reading again.

[Soren]

I think that we all have had feelings like this at one time or another for someone. Feelings that at the time we could not express. You have done very well to put them down in words that convey the message of love. Love is giving and this seems to be your wish. Most beautifully expressed.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

yes, its a cheeky little poem but it came from a place of honesty. a little bit surprised to hear that you could relate to this. (perhaps you have a sweet side only a few know? haha). have a good one. see you around

[Amy R]

What a beautiful wish, so full of lovely intentions. Soon it'll be easy for you to do when you meet her. ;)

I hope you are recovering well, sorry about that. Take care Ern, my friend.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Amy. your approval means a lot! i took a few days off and im doing a bit better. look forward to seeing you again.

[Amy R]

You're welcome, that's good you're doing better ...

[Glenda]

Your Romantica is always salve for the heart. You always write of such loving ways to serve your lover. It just touches my heart always, Ern.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Glenda. i hope it stirred a bit of romance in your life :D

[MrBlack202]

Well written poem, I lovely how you expressed the desires of the heart and all the romance in between.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you!

[Eilis]

This is a touching expression of love. The desire to set the self aside or become one with the lover through fulfilling their needs and desires is a beautiful way of manifesting the internal fulfillment of loving someone deeply.

I like the surprise of the poem alongside the title which denotes a physical idea, but we find it’s a fragment of the idea expressed. There is a sense in the images that the speaker and the lover are in a private universe and that heightens the expression. As though loving someone deeply can make the outer world disappear. A lovely expression of fulfillment in connection.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you so much. you really felt the layers of this work, i'm glad.

[Sami Khalil]

Delighted to read, delightful to think of. Romance is the underlying currents of felt love.
Wow!

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

than you!!!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome Ern.