Is it even worth mentioning (Love poem #3)

love poem

 

Is it even worth mentioning
 how much you mean to me,
 how empty I’d be
without your reassuring
comforting smile?

Everything, everything.
Words are so vulgar
words are so vile
made fatuous by the sound of laughter
 by a touch
 to fondle your breasts
 to kiss your mouth
an afternoon unmeshed
by your smile, by your pout.

 

I need you, I want you

I know nothing, nothing
but that much is true.

Author's Note

sorry if i missed anyone's comments. i get over 30 notifications a day and some things get lost in the chaos. hope you are enjoying this series of love poetry by yours truly.

Reviews

[Eilis]

I like the tone you’ve struck here. Anyone who has been in love will know how many words gather in the throat as we seek the right ones to share. That’s what I thought of as I read this. When you love deeply no words or thoughts seem to be adequate to express the depth of those feelings. We seek invention, singularity, our own language to share with the lover. The poet writes poem after poem trying to articulate what it is they feel but again and again the words feel as though they fall short.

That is what I was think when I read this. That dance we do with ourselves to try to evoke the fullness that love can house within us. The words here create a sense of a mind racing as it encounters the newness, the intensity. Falling in love can feel like a spiritual experience. The lover becoming a deity in our eyes. I thought your words did well to encompass that state of love.

Have you read Neruda at all? I enjoyed your poem for the way it shows how love impacts in multifaceted ways. How it can mystify.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

absolutely adore Naruda, although he didn't influence this piece. this was inspired by experience not literature. thinking about this person, i tried to put in simple words how i felt. the newness and intensity of it, it felt great and so i penned it to try and hold on to that memory.

Ern.

P.S i deleted that troll comment.

[Eilis]

Sorry, I wasn’t meaning to imply the poem was inspired by Neruda. Just thought you might enjoy his poems if you hadn’t read them since you are exploring love poetry.

[...Relic...]

It's often hard to put into words how we feel about someone. You did a great job here, Ern. Depending how a woman feels, I'm sure poets have a bit of advantage if the woman is sentimental.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

doesn't always work haha but it's worth a shot

[Pete]

apparently it is and well worth it. surely a man in love.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Pete!

[Betty Hermelee]

You show us with your excellent words how much you love...I can feel the emotion in this piece...it's as if you want even more words to express...like there is not enough...you want more...you certainly have a knack for love poems.... I enjoy them... takes me back to my younger, more passionate days...
Warmly, B

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks B. i'm not much of a hearthrob but i wanted to see what i can do. glad you felt all the emotions!

[Betty Hermelee]

YES! And you're very welcome!
Warmly, B

[red93]

People like this are golddust Ern and we are lucky indeed to have them. Nice Work ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks red!

[MrBlack202]

Lovely poem, beautiful and simple

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks MrBlack. i tried to keep it simple with this one and had a lot of fun writing it.

[Sami Khalil]

This romantic poem evokes the magic of love that fills us with wonder of the beloved.
Love is more than chemistry; it is spiritual in essence.
Marvelous!

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

absolutely. thanks for you review!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[JessyJacob]

Hey lisass do you really care oh nnoo

Your dirty writings even may look for kind heart you are erotica nice architect where marie is looking for. You need to f* her because she needs it. You both seem to hav same dreams ...

Firher deep a deep is required you know zhe enjoyed of your tall for 10 yrs thats why not leaving your curcle of 4 still hNging that guy was a family guy so left her but you guys look belong tk brothel couldnt stop ficking friend sister too admiring her looks great ethics of your family
You know what you both belong to same clan kali sastrt family..

Thats why ill fate of you .. and hers ..how 5 4 will giv enough but 6 is awesomely better thzn 5 6..

You git it right
I know you catch people thoughts right..n

Eyes are youe a*s. Whose female or mzle..

[Lorry]

Sometimes words are not required, which is s mighty strange comment to make on a writing site, but you know what I mean.
Being in the moment with her, the look - the feel and being lost in the silence of the moment is all that is truly required.
Saying that though, your words aren't too shabby either! 😃

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

moments where words are not necessary are the best. but they do not last, while writing does! that's the one advantage the written word has. and so i guess i tried memorialise that memory of our time in my own way.
always glad to chat with you Lorry. have a good one!

[Marie]

Erotica pure and simple... A spellbinding write, Ern. Thank you for sharing..

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i'm glad you picked up the sexy stuff in this little piece. yes, i have a dirty side!

[Ken Simm.]

Some things should just be as beautifully simple as this.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Ken. i spent a lot of time brooding so now i try to keep life simple. simple pleasure, simple things.