Is it even worth mentioning (Love poem #3)

love poem

 

Is it even worth mentioning
 how much you mean to me,
 how empty I’d be
without your reassuring
comforting smile?

Everything, everything.
Words are so vulgar
words are so vile
made fatuous by the sound of laughter
 by a touch
 to fondle your breasts
 to kiss your mouth
an afternoon unmeshed
by your smile, by your pout.

 

I need you, I want you

I know nothing, nothing
but that much is true.

Author's Note

sorry if i missed anyone's comments. i get over 30 notifications a day and some things get lost in the chaos. hope you are enjoying this series of love poetry by yours truly.

Reviews

[Eilis]

I like the tone you’ve struck here. Anyone who has been in love will know how many words gather in the throat as we seek the right ones to share. That’s what I thought of as I read this. When you love deeply no words or thoughts seem to be adequate to express the depth of those feelings. We seek invention, singularity, our own language to share with the lover. The poet writes poem after poem trying to articulate what it is they feel but again and again the words feel as though they fall short.

That is what I was think when I read this. That dance we do with ourselves to try to evoke the fullness that love can house within us. The words here create a sense of a mind racing as it encounters the newness, the intensity. Falling in love can feel like a spiritual experience. The lover becoming a deity in our eyes. I thought your words did well to encompass that state of love.

Have you read Neruda at all? I enjoyed your poem for the way it shows how love impacts in multifaceted ways. How it can mystify.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

absolutely adore Naruda, although he didn't influence this piece. this was inspired by experience not literature. thinking about this person, i tried to put in simple words how i felt. the newness and intensity of it, it felt great and so i penned it to try and hold on to that memory.

Ern.

P.S i deleted that troll comment.

[Eilis]

Sorry, I wasn’t meaning to imply the poem was inspired by Neruda. Just thought you might enjoy his poems if you hadn’t read them since you are exploring love poetry.

[Dylan Macadham]

Ah yes, True Love is pretty much everything!
At the very least, it makes everything else bearable. Good one :)

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

so i've been told. this was written for somebody who didn't love me back. but anyway, thanks for the review. always glad when you drop by.

[Starr]

Such a longing in your words, this is quite a write, there is such a depth in what you say

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Starr. yes, i am despite all the other crap i write, a hopeless romantic.

[Dave W.]

Ern I wish I had read this sooner, very good my dude, I understand this place you have penned to well. Keep on writing.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Dave. i knew a hopeless romantic like you would enjoy this xD

[Dave W.]

Yes, indeed.

[Red Brick Keshner]

This love poem captures the intensity and depth of romantic longing and need. It eloquently captures the complexity and intensity of love, the struggle to find the right words, and the profound impact of a beloved's presence. It resonates with the universal experience of longing and the deep connection that transcends language. Another truly enjoyed produce of you ink 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Red. i am glad to know that my softer side is seen. some people call me un-emotive (no, really!) but i do feel and desire deep connection.

[Red Brick Keshner]

All humans have this softer side, I find it crazy for society to treat it as if it doesn’t exist. At least poetic licence allows the cat out of the bag some times. 👍🏻

[D. Mansfield]

Dude, with the k8nd of game you have, you must have ladies beating on your door. Awesome poem.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it might surprise you but no. there have been ladies but they never stuck around and i know thats because of my own faults. thanks for the read! see you around.

[Robert Trakofler]

I have an appreciation for the simplistic way that you express affection in this because inside of the simplistic unfolds a much deeper meaning within the language the feeling of how words become almost useless and impractical to express your feelings is very palpable in this poem

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Robert. i think there is sometimes a use for more sophisticated language, but here i wanted to just say it straight.and that's how love is best expressed imo.

[Laz K.]

In case you don't know this song, I'd recommend it. Seems like it's one you might appreciate:

Enjoy the Silence
Song by Depeche Mode

Words like violence
Break the silence
Come crashing in
Into my little world
Painful to me
Pierce right through me
Can't you understand?
Oh, my little girl
All I ever wanted
All I ever needed
Is here in my arms
Words are very unnecessary
They can only do harm
Vows are spoken
To be broken
Feelings are intense
Words are trivial
Pleasures remain
So does the pain
Words are meaningless
And forgettable
Songwriters: Martin Gore

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i think Martin Gore and i were feeling the same thing. talk is cheap, yet everyone keeps on talking. this part of our culture that doesn't value the breaks in between speech means we are missing out on something.

[Pryde Foltz]

Having someone like this in your life is blessing. Your words of love made me smile and a bit winsome:) Beautiful write:)

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Pryde. always love reading your comments :D

[Amy R]

Very nice, its always a bit challenging to put your feelings into words or just say how you feel but in the end when we do, to makes sense more than anything. I enjoyed this simple yet meaningful poem.
Thanks for sharing.
-Amy

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Amy

[Relic]

It's often hard to put into words how we feel about someone. You did a great job here, Ern. Depending how a woman feels, I'm sure poets have a bit of advantage if the woman is sentimental.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

doesn't always work haha but it's worth a shot