You are beautiful (Love poem#1)

You are beautiful.

Beautiful.

All-consuming,

Graceful.

You consume the room
 as you stroll in.

You steal the stars
from the sky
   and the light
    within.

I am your man, your groom
 and you -- my moon,
  the sand, the water,
   my before, my after.

Here I die
on this cold summer’s night.

I love you,

and love you.

Fondly. Sincerely.

May you live
forever

my gem, my treasure.

 

 

2024.

Author's Note

part of a series i'll be doing on love poems.

Reviews

[Marie]

Wow! This beautiful love poem wound its way straight into my heart! So warm and sweet and very finely crafted. Love the visual detail within the poem which shows the reader how much your love means to you. Your beloved is so sublimely addressed in this masterful and very heartwarming poem! Lovely work! SO enjoyed reading and thank you for sharing, Ern...

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Marie. i'm glad you liked it. it's not as dark as the other things i write. this is part of a series so make sure you wear your heart on your sleeve this week.

[Marie]

It is not dark at all, Ern. It is a very beautiful love poem. My heart is always on my sleeve, dear friend...

[red93]

Wonderful sincere homage to a special person in yr life - certainly someone to be celebrated and admired. Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks for the review Red! always glad when you drop by.

[Betty Hermelee]

this is quite a romantic piece…. so much love fills it….. you really portray what love means to you personally
“ you consume the room”…..vivid description….you know the finality of what love is…” I am your man, your groom”…
this is intimate and honest
great!
Warmly
B🌷

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you B. i'm glad you enjoyed this cheeky little poem and found a bit of depth in it. always grateful for your comments.

Ern.

[Betty Hermelee]

You are very welcome🌷🌷🌷🌷Warmly, B

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

What a love ballad!
It should be sung.
The pledging of true and relentless love
Your love has been immortalized by this awesome piece.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you very much!

[Eilis]

I like the urgency of this. The speaker speaks of the lover being all-consuming and it shows. The adoration and sense that the speaker would absorb the lover and become one if that was possible is strong for me.

I like the touch points that show the way the love manifests. It’s like something both electrifying and essential. The stimulation of a new discovery and the comfort of those things in life that can be relied on daily. It’s a lovely juxtaposition. Love can set us on fire. You show that well here.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

i'm very impressed you were able to pick up all these things. i was actually trying to be whimsical and non-serious but i guess my true self shone through. thank you for your kind comments. see you again!

[Samuel Dickens]

Someone sure is love-struck. I doubt there is any drug one can take that will send a heart soaring as high as that of new love. From my experience, the high wears off, but there's nothing like it while it's there. May we always be brave enough to fall in love.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

there ain't no cure for love, as Leonard Cohen said. these moments are brief but i hope writing this poem makes it last a bit longer.

[maya_online]

Not used to seeing love poems from you!

As, I feel, a professional love poet lol, this is beautifully done. The words you use to describe the person you are talking about are well-chosen and the way you've structured it is gorgeous as well, even though you don't write love poems often, you could've tricked me you've done this so well !

M

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it's not my usual existential stuff. but i try to broaden my pallet and this is what came up. i hope this gave you a break from my weighty writing and i'm glad you got to see this side of me too!

[maya_online]

I love all your writing, I make sure to try and check all of it when I can.

Regardless, I'm glad to see any side of you that you wish to show, especially when it's romantic :)

[Gee]

It is so very hard to put into words the depth of love one feels for another but you sir have managed to do that, and more, in this beautifully written piece.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you Gee!

[Neville]

This is indeed a love poem & without doubt inspired by such intensity of said emotion .. much loved .. Neville

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks neville for dropping by

[JustJulie]

Hmm...Strong love.. ..passion and love light shines through this.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Julie for reading my work. i'm glad you felt something here.