Lost Understanding

what you might be feeling when your depressed or really stressed and everything just build u and when u think your getting out of it or getting on top of it it all builds up again and your back at the start

 

Am I really that unhappy

Or is it just a pretence

These tears that I see fall

Do not make any sense

 

The mix of raw emotions

Just mingle with the past

What I thought was happiness

Just doesn’t seem to last

 

Is this really freedom

Or is this what binds me

This feeling that I’m trapped

And just can’t find the key

 

This swirling through my mind

It never seems to rest

Pain, joy, sorrow, delight

Lay heavily on my chest

 

The escape is always visible

Yet always further away

Attempts to find reason

Seem more futile every day

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

I usually don't enjoy poetry with simple rhyming like this, unless they are lyrics, but I really do like this. The first line, "Am I really that unhappy", gives the tone, the curiously pondered thoughts of your own thoughts. In my recent experience, they are possible to control. Just practice being happy, happy for no reason at all, because there isn't much reason behind anything, depression included. That doesn't mean you shouldn't feel sad, but I've found that keeping it to a minimum is helpful. Thanks for entering my contest!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

This stanza stood out to me the most
"This swirling through my mind
It never seems to rest
Pain, joy, sorrow, delight
Lay heavily on my chest"
nice writing
Thank you for entering my contest

[Anna Hays]

Wow this is true to the heart ! Very honest !
I love it !

[Tessa Le Rouge]

i like this poem. the choice of words was great and thanks for sharing.

keep up the good work!

~PwK~

[Alicia Lafontaine]

I like this poem a lot. The word choice is really good. The last few stanzas really caught me.

[Gary H]

Any poem that mentions 'swirling' gets good marks from me. I can see many who will see this as a poem written for them. Really easy to read, understand and impactful.
Possibly you could remove a few words in places to make it appear more ethereal although it is pretty much perfect as it is.
Also, please re-read your poem description as it is very confusing and might put readers off!
Neat work

[Angela Rose]

Wow. Lovely, and well written. This is basically the story of my life so I can really relate to it. I love this and am going to favorite it. Thank you for sharing this with me. ^_^

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

again well done......I doubt if anyone can go through life without at some point feeling what you express..

[Rie Sheridan Rose]

Thanks for sharing, Rachel. I think we all feel this way at times. :)