Bright Eyes

Tell me what you think this is about. I'm just curious if people can see it haha

From the first day, I ever saw that smile
it’s been stuck inside my mind
Imprinted inside, I never can forget
and with those bright eyes, imprinted on my mind.
I’ll come to realise, to see another side.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves are going to
drag me down.
These waves are going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out to me.

From the first time, I spent the day with you
It’s been stuck inside our minds
Imprinted inside, but maybe you forgot
and it was your bright eyes, that walked me to the door
We came to realise, maybe there could be more.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves are going to
drag me down.
These waves are going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out to me.

Sometimes we may, be so very far apart
But it don’t matter, Coz you’ll still,
always have my heart.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves aren’t going to
drag me down.
These waves aren’t going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out for me.
My bright eyes.
Watching out for me.

Author's Note

constructive critisism welcome :)
thank you all in advance

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Well I think you found someone special and if thats true then good on you and I hope you'll both be very happy. This piece is woderful, flows just like a song. Great work :)

[Kelley]

sounds like your in love? But it also sounds like you don't want to be in love?
I thought it was a great poem either way.
Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Hisou_Tenshi]

I couldn't fully follow your metaphors. But the part about the eyes was quite beautiful, however, your wonders emplied that you didn't believe the one who'd take your heart would always be with you. But that's an easy to understand part. It was very beautiful though and a wonderful idea.

[Hisou_Tenshi]

I couldn't fully follow your metaphors. But the part about the eyes was quite beautiful, however, your wonders emplied that you didn't believe the one who'd take your heart would always be with you. But that's an easy to understand part. It was very beautiful though and a wonderful idea.

[poetic soul]

simply beautiful...loved the way you connected eyes with waves....
no criticism needed.... :))

Love,
Krishna