Bright Eyes

Tell me what you think this is about. I'm just curious if people can see it haha

From the first day, I ever saw that smile
it’s been stuck inside my mind
Imprinted inside, I never can forget
and with those bright eyes, imprinted on my mind.
I’ll come to realise, to see another side.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves are going to
drag me down.
These waves are going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out to me.

From the first time, I spent the day with you
It’s been stuck inside our minds
Imprinted inside, but maybe you forgot
and it was your bright eyes, that walked me to the door
We came to realise, maybe there could be more.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves are going to
drag me down.
These waves are going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out to me.

Sometimes we may, be so very far apart
But it don’t matter, Coz you’ll still,
always have my heart.

Bright eyes.
Shining through
the crashing tide.
These waves aren’t going to
drag me down.
These waves aren’t going to
take me out.
With one eye on
that lighthouse
I see bright eyes.
Shining out for me.
My bright eyes.
Watching out for me.

Author's Note

constructive critisism welcome :)
thank you all in advance

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Well I think you found someone special and if thats true then good on you and I hope you'll both be very happy. This piece is woderful, flows just like a song. Great work :)

[ana_]

This is really pretty

[callan]

also i think this is bout a love that migth be present or passed i m hoping present al though the lines From the first time, I spent the day with you
It’s been stuck inside our minds
Imprinted inside, but maybe you forgot

makes me fear it is pased i hope it is not coz i no we did not work but your a lovly girl and i only hope you have found some one to make you happy i finde i only post wen i m sad and hurt i hope this is not the sam and that you have found some one

[callan]

i no we have no spoke in ages but this sounds like you have found some one so i am happy for you

[Aries]

Very well written! Lyrical....Would make a Great Song!!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

great job. "bright eyes." that is a great compliment, light shining through? he was a beacon to you. someone that left an imprint in your mind? ive been there. had my share of men who left that memory in my mind. and to write poetry means they lingered on your mind so much that you had to bring pen to paper to let that light of them out...great job.

[Sarah]

So the first time I read this my immediate thought was THIS WOULD MAKE A GREAT SONG!!! Yeah, I'd definitely listen to it anyway. Especially the "chorus" really really beautiful....and it mentions a lighthouse which is an automatic win for me, lol. XD Really great job! Definitely made me smile. :)

[Enigma]

It's a smooth lyrical write best fit for and about the one you love as it not only brings out great imagery but it also tells us the story of the two lovers from the very eye of one. Very well written. I liked it!! ^_^

[EGabriellS]

This was a verygood poem and I'm glad you shared it, though i admit I can't completely understand what it was about. :)