Smile

through the hardest times in your life you just have to smile......this isnt nessacarily about me....but also people I know.

 

the sun rise is brilliant
but I don't feel its heat
My heart is still thumping
but I don't feel its beat
The ocean is clear
but there is poison within
You look like an angel
but your so full of sin

 

 

smile for the sun and smile for the rain
smile for the drug that takes the edge off the pain
smile for our broken hearts; we'll never heal
smile for belief in the things that aren't real

 

I'll smile for you if you smile for me
I'll smile while thinking of things that can't be
I'll smile while laughing at things that aren't true
I'll smile forever and only for you

 

 

The sun sets with death
but it rises with life
A set path for your dreams
but leads only to strife
I gave you my heart
but you left here without it
You say you won't miss me
but you do, just a bit

 

 

smile for the sun and smile for the rain
smile for the drug that takes the edge off the pain
smile for our broken hearts; we'll never heal
smile for belief in the things that aren't real

 

I'll smile for you if you smile for me
I'll smile while thinking of things that can't be
I'll smile while laughing at things that aren't true
I'll smile forever and only for you

 

 

can you fix this heart
can you fix it, can you fix it
can you heal my past
can you fix it, can you fix it
can you make this last
can you fix it can you fix it
can you...

Author's Note

again just tell me what you think it is about, what you think of it and constructie critisism is most welcome :) thank you in advance

Reviews

[~angelalala~]

i loved loved loved this poem. i loved the sadness underneath it, the realization that there is so much more to everything than what we see. i especially loved the 1st stanza & the 4th stanza. my constructive criticism would be to stop after the 5th stanza. repeating the 3rd stanza takes away from the words to me, & the last stanza doesn't seem to even go with this poem, it kind of just pops out of nowhere. but i think repeating the 2nd stanza after this person leaves you adds more power to the message your portraying here. to smile through the pain. overall this is a great write & going in my favorites.

[All faded blue]

Melancholy acceptance of the bad along with the good, and a seeming determination to make the best of what is left. I do think the very last verse seems out of touch with the rest of the poem, not sure what I would have done to finish it off, it just doesn't work for me. Other than that, loved it!!

[Emmie Girl]

i think this poem is pretty good, but the last verse is just, umm, i don't kow. I guess it just doesn't really seem to fit or flow or something...Just my personal opinion.

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