I Will

was gona post this before i all crashed..........iv had sum rough times and this is a 'promise' if thts wat u wnt 2 call it, that i will really try

 

I will just keep crying

These tears will never slow

It will just keep raining

The sun will never show

 

The pain will keep on throbbing

Keep tearing me apart

For the memory of you

Will cut through my bleeding heart

 

I will smile through my tears

Show the world that I am fine

I will adjust to the numbness

It will just take some time

 

I will embrace the loneliness

Though I still feel like I’m dying

I promised to resist deaths kiss

So now I will just keep trying

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wow!! Such an awesome poem.It has a sad feeling to it, but I enjoyed it all the same.I can even relate to it, pretty easily. You crafted your thoughts into words in a very impressive way.The rhyme is great, no doubt about it. And the way you've said to yourself that you'll keep on trying, it's very inspirational.
Great Job!!!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

i know this pain,
let your heart heal
beautiful piece

[PhoeniX]

oh i hear you sister. keep trying

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Keep trying is the precious key that hold in the palm of your hand. Keep writing, you have a wonderful way with words. Thank you for sharing. debileah

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

THis is a wonderful piece with great flow. It's more possitive about going on rather than embracing as you say deaths kiss. A really good write!

[Celtic Cat]

Yes, best to embrace rather than to fear. Once you make peace with something, it can't haunt you anymore. You remind me a bit of me, I was once dead-on described by a 'psychic' upon gazing at my picture that I am "a multitude of tears". I could have hydrated all the world, had they not been salty. Chin up, whatever doesn't kill us makes us stronger, as Nietchze (sp?!) taught us. By time you're my age, you, too, will be "strong like bull" - Police Academy quote (if memory serves). ((((many hugs)))) Please know you are not alone, will never be alone. So many of us feel this pain, over and over, but we can and do recover. Much love~~

[Gary H]

I think this is a lot more positive now than after reading the sad poems. For me the final line show hope for the future and I do believe that you should stick to this 'promise'.
Well done for thinking this way. The poem flows nicely so nice writing as well!