SWEET SUICIDE

 

Sweetest release

Unto freedom I fly

Ice cold metal

Cuts me free

I hate this life

Death is here for me

Ending all this pain

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Interesting poem. I'm so glad to finally read something so simple. I really admire how the verses actually make sense. :P As for the validity of what you're saying, I believe in the the right to death as the right to life. Although I am quite the suicidal type, I will never go for it myself, seeing as all it'll get me is an article in the newspaper (at the most)... and I really don't want to give people the satisfaction that I actually did it... Yes, I have that many people who don't like me. T.T

Anyways, I really did like your poem. The theme and the tone were perfection. I really hope you don't feel this way, though. Very well-done.

Ironically Yours, -Blade and Blood

P.S. As I read this poem, it sort of reminded me of a really good song. ^^ Check it out! http://youtube.com/watch?v=MJDDxHIaaVk

[Tessa Le Rouge]

even though it is about suicide..i love it. is that bad to say? well i am a cutter so maybe i'm biased. but i do love it. but i still feel obligated to tell you that this is not a solution. i hope that one day you will see this and stop. there will always be problems, soon you're going to run out of places to numb them.

here if you need me.

xoXO
Theresa

[justink :):)]

you are much to young..... you are in my prayers .....hope to read mpre from you

[Celtic Cat]

Honey, don't you dare. You are far too young, too alive, too precious to waste over the rejection of one soul, kindred, mate, or not. Souls who leave this plane by suicide do not go to a good place at all. You think you're in hell now... it gets worse. Stay here, time will help, keep writing, and find some positive people to hold your hand through this. You know your friends here are here for you. You are in my prayers...hope to read more writing from you....SOON!!!
Peace and much love~~

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I tend to agree with Captain Blackheart on this. You are in my thoughts and prayers. Keep sharing you feelings, keep writing. Debileah

[Gary H]

Mmmm. OK so the second line would be better as 'Untold freedom' or 'Utmost freedom'? If you are considering this then I would choose 'Unwise freedom' - thats not to be funny but who knows if what seems a good idea at the time eventually turns out to be one? And remember Death is Not the End.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

SNAP OUT OF IT......this is not a solution. You should speak to someone, friend, family anyone. At the time everything seem worse than what it actually is....you need to put things in perspective. On the poem itself an very dark and intresting read!