Gnome

Wrote this silly lil poem about a garden gnome who just wants to relax however his Gnome “responsibilities” are holding him back hehe

I am a gnome in a garden of roses who whispers to the orchids of my jarring, stern stillness. I converse with the birds of the symphonies of the sky and wail to the insects of my stiffness. I am a gnome whose porcelain heart has cracked under the years of bleak and windy days sick and tired of watching life go by while I stand and waste away. So here I stand with my chipped hat and my withered discoloured overalls watching the bees fly and the spiders crawl. For I am a piece of decoration, an ornamental trophy, a painted smile from ear to ear I wish to be free. I witness life drift forward where I take not a step. I make not a sound. I shall now be saying this with a frown, I am a gnome in this garden and I wish I could back down.

Author's Note

Ignore my spelling, punctuation and grammar !!

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

This has a lot going for it. I don't know where you stand as far as seriousness of writing, but I have found that for me writing is nothing but revisions. And I normally don't care as much for prose poems but this one caught my mind. Nice job.

Winston

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Thank you winston your comment was very kind, at the moment I’m just having fun with writing and poetry so I don’t really have a real grasp on it yet I’m just going with the flow. :)

[Gee]

Like this. Can picture him all alone, weather beaten, faded, waiting for that one severe frost that will signal his end.

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Thank you:)) glad u liked it !

[Mauricio Montoya]

your words speak to be natural to sit a side and hear like a fly on the wall of what we could never see, love how you brought this together such a great way to see things we can't never understand. thank you for your share

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Thank you for your lovely comment :)

[Chris Shaw]

Visually cute. I could see your little gnome with his cracked heart, out in all weathers. He needs a holiday:)

Chris

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I enjoyed writing the imagery too, I’m glad you liked it chris !

[LizBot3]

That gnome is me 😂 that feeling that life is literally happening right in front of you but u feel rooted, stuck. Great piece, well done!

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Thank you Liz !! I love the support from a fellow Irish hehe

[LizBot3]

Ah I just saw that there! I was actually up north for the first time over the summer! I had a blast!

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It’s good craic 🤣🙌🙌

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Erin:),

I found this to be a very enjoyable read ... Thank you for sharing ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

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Thank you very much

[retreating ghost]

Clever metaphor and beautifully used too, enjoyed reading it :).

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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it! If u enjoyed this you should check out some of my other work !

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Erin... by the Sea where flowers bloom and Birds sing...
a Gnome finds their way back home... softly, Pat

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Thank you for your lovely comment pat x :))

[Tom]

You bring human qualities to the lonesome and bored garden gnome, personifiying disillusionment with its past and current situation, yep, many human folk do feel this way as if permanently stuck in a rut, or like a hamster always running circles within a wire wheel though never moving from where it started, I get you here, clever, imaginative metaphor indeed!!!

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Thank you Tom ✨🙌

[Ken Simm.]

Lovely and whimsical. More than just concerning gnomes.

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Thank you Ken 🙈

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful poem. Enjoyed reading 🙂

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Thank you, I’m glad you liked it !