Enough

I hope you'll be reading this

You had gave it all.

You had tried your best.

You always trying to fish the world

To bring them as a gift to her.

 

All you ever wanted is her to smile.

You wanted her to stay happy.

Just like you always felt

When she's here.

 

But then she's gone,

She have her true priority,

She have her happy place to attend to,

She always have her reasons.

 

Then you stand,

Trying to feel strong,

Trying to deny that you're weak,

But it's not everyone's fault.

 

She is as innocent as you.

You are as innocent as her.

Sometimes I wonder why fate met you both.

I'm sorry because it hurts you both.

 

I always watched you cried.

I always know that you are kind.

When you hold me,

Saying that you're okay.

 

Now please no more lies,

No more pretentious,

No more fake smiles,

No more fake laughter.

 

Behind my back,

You bleed yourself,

You dropped yourself,

You broke yourself

Because you felt it's real.

 

I'm hurt now,

I'm crying now,

I'm so sad now,

You always hate yourself.

 

Just let it go,

Just let your guilt go,

You had tried your best,

Enough is enough!!

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[The]

I strolled here while looking on the "Online Writers" subheading. If you want me to continue to give constructive criticisim of your works, I will. I only read poems.

This work has a strong sentiment to it. I feel tenderly the emotion you're attempting to convey to the reader, and in that regard, you've succeeded. I understand this piece may/may not be a coping mechanism, so I'll pass on the technical critique.

I'll just add this: vivid images and clear language is more poignant than abstracions and vague expressions. "You gave it your all" is a cliche. Just work on specificity, and I'm sure you'll improve.

Best of luck on your future writings.

--CB

[Bejn Jonathon Edwards]

Pretty awesome.