Creation

When the rain falls softly on the quiet earth greedily snapped up by the receptive soil,
The slow waltz of raindrops marches down the window, looking for a place to grow,
A lonely trail of a lost raindrop show clearly his losing battle to be with his friends.

          ~~~~OoOoOoO~~~~~


When growth that does not happen over shortage of promises made ​​by the rain,
Your heart feels betrayed by the beautiful dreams that never came to fruition,
The soft rain is the promise of purity and promising growth.

          ~~~~OoOoOoO~~~~~


Tomorrow's dream will just remain a dream if yesterday's promises are never seen,
Just open your mind and listen to the soft spoken words of the rain to the virgin soil,
Enduring fascination will appear from nowhere to somewhere after promises in sight.
          
          ~~~~OoOoOoO~~~~~


Yesterday's drought and possible promises of blessing when the soft tender wetness enters the earth,
When the young plants break through the soil to dance in the rays of the sun,
The soft whisper of the morning glow enters your heart and creates anticipation of new beginnings.

          ~~~~OoOoOoO~~~~~

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Angad Waraich]

"Tomorrow's dream will just remain a dream if yesterday's promises are never seen,
Just open your mind and listen to the soft spoken words of the rain to the virgin soil,
Enduring fascination will appear from nowhere to somewhere after promises in sight."
loved this paragraph.

A great write.

Enjoyed it.
Thank you.

-Angad

[hardeep sabharwal]

its a very nice work here,, I like your expression and msg,,

tomorrow s dream .... is my favorite line here
good job

[TheWritingWriter]

I think this is a wonderful poem! Word painting is awesome.

The one thing that I would like to see more of here is the use of other senses to tell us more about this feeling. I see a lot of things being observed by sight. What about smell, touch, hear, and potentially taste? By utilizing all these senses, it will completely immerse the reader into an experience that I think even you would be surprised with.

However, if what you are going for is strictly on the surface in order to convey something specific, I think you nailed it. Let me know what you are going for!

Great piece and I look forward to reading more of your material!

Have a wonderful day!

[Erana]

Thank you for those kind words...I am new at this...learning the English language at the moment, use of the words. Thank you for the advice will try to use them in the future. The English language is beautiful...hope to be able to use feelings in my poems soon.
~E