Complaint : Human Nature.

A chance to live or a chance to choose,

A broken fist or a broken bruise.

A matter of fact, your coward human,

Why not unleash your demons when he's to run?

No bravery when there are sneers,

No song of victory when no one hears.

Care, be stern,

Don't let me burn.

What remains of me,

Ashes and part He.

Still alive a part of mine,

How can I die when I'm divine?

Reviews

[khalid]

it is such the mind provoking issue .. Are We Really Free?...this issue has occopied the thoughts of philosophers for many years and it still does. some think that human being is doing only what fate allows him to do, some think human beings are completely free, some think that people are free in some issues and they are not in some others...that is the human nature..

[Nikki Hughes]

Spoken like a true poet. Excellent choice of words.

[Night]

There are two sides to every coin as there are two sides to life...good and evil, light and dark, life and death...we choose the world we live in...for what a man believes in his heart so he is....to be human is to error...=)

[KAOlmsted]

I ask myself the same thing...it seems so unfair. Thanks for sharing this very fine write with us.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

I'm glad you could connect to it. Thank you.

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure.

[Jack...]

Often the phrase, "It's human nature" is used following something someone deos that is good or something someone does that is bad. I wonder how close to equal they both might be. Very straightforward and I liked the feel of this.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Very right that is, Jack. Thank you.

[Frieda P]

Could you pack anymore into this read? Raises a lot of questions within the soul and divides and conquers the mind. Nice one...love that last line.

'How can I die when I'm divine?'

That packs a punch!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Oh, sure, I'll elaborate the idea and add some more verses.
Thank you Frieda. :)

[quinfinn]

this is a brilliantly done foray into the duality of humanity...mortality/divinity...we are both in so many ways.... love and hatred, good and evil, here and gone....together or alone. absolutely awesome write!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thank you quin.

[Nami Machae]

oh wow, this i really enjoyed. such a short poem for so much emotion. keep it up

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Thanks. :)

[gombeggar]

is the complaint of human nature? for or against? i mean i see the inner struggle u seem to present here

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Both. It's actually the way you see it. Human nature is cruel and divine at the same time. But, I feel here, the complaint is against it.

[Wolf]

i really enjoyed this write keep it up "dont let me burn" I really felt this line we all feel like people we trust let us burn we we truly need them.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Exactly. Thank you. :)