What if I told you

What if I told you

A Poem by Woody
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To my son

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What if I said you were mortal

And there was an end to your ride?

And that you’d walk through that portal

And be stuck on the other side?

 

What if when departing this earth

You’ll leave behind your possessions?

Does it bring you sadness or mirth

To have no answers, just questions?

 

So live your life now and be bold

Do good unto others, my son

Today Leave your mark on the world

A sure way your name will live on 

 

 

© 2016 Woody


Author's Note

Woody
I'm sure as hell don't know where this came from. I'm as surprised as you are, guys.
if you could improve on the poetic side of this.. thing, I'd be much obliged.

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You have asked the question that many of us have searched for. This is why there are so many religions. They all have different solutions - some banal, some kindly and some vicious. I asked the same questions in my poem "Wholly Unholy".
You don;t need to improve on your poetic presentation, Woody. It is brief ,concise and realistically worded..

Norman

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

Norman, it must be lack of confidence but I can never admit to myself thatt my poems are passable. h.. read more



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wait, what? a poem? have I been gone that long?.. just kidding Woody. This was a sweet, wise write filled with sincere and touching humility. It is funny watching young children with their endless questions, but we quickly learn as an adult we still don't really know anything and each answer brings about another question. Your advice here is honest and heartfelt. I have missed you my friend and I enjoyed seeing this soft side.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

8 Years Ago

That "serious heart" is what draws your reader in, because underneath the comedy and wonderful stori.. read more
Woody

8 Years Ago

big hugs right back atcha. i hope you're here to stay. we've lost so many good ones.
AprilRN1210

8 Years Ago

wandering souls always come home, I have too many precious friends here not to find my way back.
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Leo
nicely penned and wise..keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

glad you like my rare "serious" pieces, stranger. thanks a lot.
A brilliant message from a father to his son. In the end the only thing that matters is what we've done for others and that we did our best.

I enjoyed it immensely

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

thanks a lot my friend. that's what I've always believed. Robinson Crusoe managed to live on his own.. read more
Every once in a while fatherly instincts kick in, it can't be helped.
Having said that, this is a beautiful piece giving a life lesson in a rite of passage sorta way. Nice moving peice.... ya done good Woody.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

thank you so much, Sir. I believe children need all the guidance they can get in these troubled time.. read more
After reading a few of your cornball postings, not knowing what to say in a review, then I come to this sweet gem of a poem! Bravo! I love the writing, the message, & the earnest tone. There are spots of unexpected brilliance thru-out. Now back to reap a few more ears of corn . . . (thanks for sharing!)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

8 Years Ago

Oh, I beg to differ! I think your serious writes reveal an interesting mind. I didn't mean to slamread more
Woody

8 Years Ago

arrrggh!!! the site's done it again! it says read more but won't open :(
anyway, thanks a bun.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

I sent you a message anyway. I hope you can read that.
In the end, what we leave behind counts the most.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

my thoughts exactly, Bob. thanks for taking the time.
I like it. Instantly reminded me of something you might see in the book of Proverbs, since that's also framed as a father giving advice to his son. And you rhyme without it being garish.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

thank you so much H.S. not being a real poet, I can only be flattered that you find this piece inter.. read more
Wow! this is serious piece of work!
I like the depth of the verses and the inherent theme.
I read it again, and felt it like reading it one more time.

Many layers here, on the opening verses

"What if I said you were mortal
And there was an end to your ride?
And that you’d walk through that portal
And be stuck on the other side? "

Great job, woody!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

I'm flattered you found this one interesting, too. thanks loads Abhilas.
I don't write poetr.. read more
Impressive, and good advice to boot!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

8 Years Ago

I keep telling readers that I'm subconsciously trying to prove to myself and others probably that I'.. read more

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