I'd die for you

can't find a thing to say. sorry

They’d finished making love and lay, spent

They were sprawled in the shade, dozing off

He looked into her eyes and he went:

I’d die for you, I’m not showing off

She purred: pray tell how many times, dude

And climbed in the dumpster, looking for food

Reviews

[paperfox]

Woody, my good man ... I simply insist you meet a pal of mine I met on this very day. He's the 3rd Musketeer. He's probably a tad more romantic in spirit. But that's what's great about him.

And it would be a weeping tale of sorrow should you guys miss out on each other.

Today is one of those rare days me thinks :)

[Woody]

Hi mate. thanks heaps for stopping by. I'd be glad to read your friend, if he's on this site.

[paperfox]

add me cos I don't have a clue how to do it

[Woody]

I'll send a friend request

[Debra White]

Hi Woody :)
A bit of the twist at the end there! Funny.... although, everyone has their needs...
I like the alliteration of love/lay and sprawled/shade. I always enjoy rhymed poetry, makes it flow.
I think maybe using speech marks around the dialogue would be a good idea, although I'm not sure if you're after critique or just indication of reader enjoyment.... either way, I enjoyed this a lot :)
Cheers, Debra :)

[Woody]

Hello Debra,

I, too, am old fashioned and much prefer rhymed poems. and, of course,I don't mind critiques. I'm here in the Cafe as much to try to entertain as to learn and improve. I did think of putting quotation marks there but, thinking it might look cluttered, I settled for colons. what d'u think?
thanks heaps, Debra. overjoyed that you liked it :)

[Gee]

Lol,that's either my neighbours or dem pesky moggies,great ending Woody

[Woody]

Hey Gee! thank you, Man. been watching the cats in my neighbourhood and I can tell you that all they think of is stuff themselves.
thanks G. glad you liked this one.

[Valentine]

I heard that stuff leaves a person a bit hungry. Valentine

[Woody]

yes, Ma'm. oftentimes, I'd wake up famished in the middle of the night and raid the fridge :)
thank you kathie.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are one of a kind, Woody....what an ending...

making love and then dumpster diving.

[Woody]

haha yes I needed to sign off with a surprise. there are plenty of stray cats in my neighbourhood. so I'm a bit of an expert.
thanks a lot jacob.

[Just Cat]

Haha thought it was kinda sweet, but then it made me laugh!
Nice work :D

[Woody]

I guess it comes from my love for cats. aren't they adorable? :)
thanks a bunch Cat (no wonder you liked it).

[Just Cat]

They ARE adorable and one day will have one, but (despite my name) I'm more of a dog person haha.read moreThey ARE adorable and one day will have one, but (despite my name) I'm more of a dog person haha.
Still loved the poem though.

[Woody]

thanks again Cat. glad you liked it.

[Samuel Dickens]

Hey, food, like love, is where you find it. After all that sex and sprawling about, someone's gotta go for the sandwiches. (or is it fish heads?)

[Woody]

haha I know Sam. sex'll do that to you. gives you a little hunger.
thanks a lot you Sam.

[Marie]

I'm assuming they were cats, right?

[Woody]

obviously :) a couple of hints in there.
had that idea and had to try it. nothing grand, I know. thanks Marie.