I'd die for you

can't find a thing to say. sorry

They’d finished making love and lay, spent

They were sprawled in the shade, dozing off

He looked into her eyes and he went:

I’d die for you, I’m not showing off

She purred: pray tell how many times, dude

And climbed in the dumpster, looking for food

Reviews

[paperfox]

Woody, my good man ... I simply insist you meet a pal of mine I met on this very day. He's the 3rd Musketeer. He's probably a tad more romantic in spirit. But that's what's great about him.

And it would be a weeping tale of sorrow should you guys miss out on each other.

Today is one of those rare days me thinks :)

[Woody]

Hi mate. thanks heaps for stopping by. I'd be glad to read your friend, if he's on this site.

[paperfox]

add me cos I don't have a clue how to do it

[Woody]

I'll send a friend request

[Scrap]

Oh this is so fun. I actually animated it in my mind. :)

[Woody]

haha thank you Scrap. glad you liked it.

[Cathy Wattam]

I love this Woody. Great twist. My only teeny, tiny change would be in the last line - I would have put "And climbed in the dumpster, looking for food" just because it flows more smoothly. Of course, this is only my humble opinion and may not be the cat's whiskers ;)

[Woody]

thank you, Cathy. I trust your poetic ear as I have none, I admit. but just for the sake of arguing, the "to" in my line means purpose. climbed in order to look for food. whereas your suggestion is only a description "looking".
I welcome all suggestions when it comes to poetry. if I'm not making sense please say so and I'll make the change since you feel it would be smoother.
thanks again Dear and I'm glad you liked it :)

[Cathy Wattam]

You're welcome. Although one could argue that 'to look for' and 'looking for' really say the same thing. It is of course your poem and I have no problem with you sticking to your guns. Seems I'm 'feline' a bit catty tonight....

[Woody]

not at all. I trust your judgement. believe me, in my circle of poets they call me Van Gogh.
I'll make the change

[Woody]

done! thank you for the suggestion.

[Cathy Wattam]

My pleasure dude ;)

[V]

Sort of ironic tone in it. The twist before the last line makes it interesting.

[Woody]

hi Vanessa. thanks for taking the time to read this silly little poem. I hope you didn't take it too seriously. it was meant to bring a smile. based on the idea that cats had nine lives :)

[V]

No, I didn't, I think I got it mostly right ;)

[Elise Anton]

You know what came to mind when I read this - and I've since come back to it with the same impression: Two cats! Seriously! The imagery is perfect. Or am I an idiot who is just stating the obvious??? I love it whatever the verdict!

[Woody]

haha you're far from being an idiot. of course they're our beloved felines. many indications. not least of them "how many times?"
see, that's my kind of poetry. fun and rhyme :)

[Elise Anton]

I get it! We have a male cat my boys refused to get 'fixed'. He's six now and I reckon our 'dude' is on his next to last life, judging by the look of him. Some mornings he comes home with a particular gleam in his eye. Sleeps the entire day. I showed the boys this, they cracked up! You have two new fans :)

[Woody]

lol I'm over the moon :) let them read the limericks. I think they'd like them.

[Elise Anton]

Will do. Haven't read those yet myself. Been busy debating the merits of rhyme with some dude called Woody, sorry!

[Solar]

Did he gave her 9/10 ? And she has good taste - that freegan puss!

[Woody]

haha thanks for dropping in, Solar. I hope you got the joke and understood they're not humans :)

[Solar]

^ ^
(^~^) totally the whiskers

[Dana Ferguson]

I cracked up at the line with "dude" in it haha This was so unique, and I'm not a 'real poet' by any means but in my opinion this was a great poem. The ending got me and I had to read it again to understand that a human was not digging in the dumpster haha but anyways great job I enjoyed it :)

[Woody]

haha so glad you enjoyed this, Dana. that was my objective., dude :)
I was inspired by the hilarious posts and videos of cats on the net. priceless!
thank you for taking the time.

[jesserose99]

Can't find a thing to say, well if this is can't find a thing to say Woody, I wonder what finding a thing to say is. I mean I am blown away. Love in the harsh world of reality that many of us know nothing of. Some of us know more of then others...and yet, very few here typing poems clearly know of it now.

Death could be close to two in that situation, a realness, a rawness that is so honest. The dude, well it puts a twisted humor to it. which isn't life twisted humor, a dark twisted humor that is every day if you look deep enough.

Sorry Woody...back at you...This is poetry!

[Woody]

thanks loads jesse. It means a lot to me when real poets praise my feeble attempts at poetry.

[Tom]

Love springs eternal even in the most unlikely of places !

A fine feline fable Woody !

[Woody]

haha I totally agree, Tom. I've made love to my wife in the most unlikely places, myself. oops!not the kind of things you talk about in the open. me and my big mouth!! tsk tsk!
thank you so much for stopping by Tom.

[Tom]

Don't hide your light under a bushel Woody...lol

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

bahahahahaa...i loved the way she said "pray tell how many times, dude" -- very ironic, sardonic even.

[Woody]

ta very much Nadia. I love cats. don't you? they're the stars of the internet at the moment.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

oh yes, absolutely. i have my very own who owns me!

[Woody]

love your new pic, by the way :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Woody, this is a hoot! Very subtle reference to cats 9-lives....very nicely done.

[Woody]

thank you dear Anna. glad it made you laugh :)