Life

Life

A Poem by Woody
"

what can I say? life's not fair.

"

Poor boy
Rich girl
Used toy
Moon pearls
Hunger rife
Gold plate
Each life
Is fate

© 2015 Woody


Author's Note

Woody
well well well! lookee here! something not funny for a change!!!

trying to emulate Marie with this short-line poem. d'you think I should stick to the funny stuff?

(Marie suggested some changes)

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I was not expecting this from you Woody.
I love when you surprise me with something different.
It shows just how talented and versatile you are.

Life is not fair. I think we both know this from experience, but it's life and so we rise to the challenge regardless of the plate we're holding. xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

True true, but an 'o' would have been quite alright.
You're welcome Woody. As funny as you .. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

O it is, then. :)
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

: )



Reviews

dear Woody... Moon pearls are for
everyone! Stars twinkle for lovers
under moonbeams. A sweet and
endearing poem. truly, Pat

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

I knew a Patricia, once. her friends called her Trish.
yes Patricia is definitely a beautiful.. read more
Patricia Wedel

9 Years Ago

My parents told me when I was two yrs
old they called me Trish, but when people
aske.. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

nothing wrong with nicknames and diminutives. they're quite endearing and show a fair degree of inti.. read more
I was not expecting this from you Woody.
I love when you surprise me with something different.
It shows just how talented and versatile you are.

Life is not fair. I think we both know this from experience, but it's life and so we rise to the challenge regardless of the plate we're holding. xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

True true, but an 'o' would have been quite alright.
You're welcome Woody. As funny as you .. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

O it is, then. :)
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

: )
This is really good. Enjoyed it.

Last two lines stick out don't seem to be in the same theme as the above.

"Life less
Full Life" ...maybe?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

thank you very much mate. glad you enjoyed this one. not my usual type of poetry :)
last two .. read more
Not your usual...the only thing I would change is the last line...to...its fate. Valentine

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

haha full of surprises, aren't I?
yes, I see what you mean. interesting change but then woul.. read more
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Gee
Seems every body is giving this multiple reads Woody,well I've read it 217 times and it's fine by me,but,saying that I am an illegitimate uneducated!!!If you change it then it ain't yours,leave as is and take on board all of the clever folks suggestions for the next one.Take care

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gee

9 Years Ago

Och,away an' boil yer heed(Scottish accent please)Woody my old mucker we are both borne from the non.. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

haha love your Scottish accent, lad. you're right we were born from the same womb (brother from anot.. read more
Gee

9 Years Ago

Lol,indeed it is..
Hi woody, seems she is a lot better off than him. Doesn't seem fair. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

Grazie Mattavelli. (your name sounds Italian) :)
yes that was the idea. true, nobody said lif.. read more
i like this...the juxtaposition of the two..reminds me of the four seasons' song...Toy Soldier mixed with a little "i'll be a big man in town"---

many of those sixties songs where two people meet and fall in love but one is from the poor side of town and so they cannot be together.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

yes jacob, I've seen a few movies and read stories of that kind. it's wonderful when love wins event.. read more
I read this twice to understand what you were saying.And here's my take:
Poor boy
Rich girl
Used toy
Moon pearls
Black knife
Gold plate
Each life
Is fate

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie

9 Years Ago

Well, okay. Her's the thing. All the other lines are just two syllables; "hunger rife" is three. I c.. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

if you read it right, you can make it sound like 2 syllables.
Marie

9 Years Ago

I guess so...at least I can't think of anything better.
Nice job Woody
I read it a couple of times and thought about how you said life's not fair and then restructured the last lines.
If you flop the last 4 lines to
Blissful fate
Wretched life
Life is great
Too much strife
It gives it a whole new meaning haha
Thanks for sharing Woody!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Woody

9 Years Ago

yes it gives it a new meaning but that's damn good, Gaston

thank you very much Gaston.. read more

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Added on May 20, 2015
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Mateur, Bizerte, Tunisia



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