night

a rhymed version of Marie's free verse of the same title

The balmy night has tiptoed in

Gently nudging off the day

Its quarter of lime in sequins

Reigning on indigo bay

Studded with diamond seeds

On a black flowering spray 

Author's Note

Marie wanted me to post this but I'm not sure about the rhythm and the scan and all that jazz.

Reviews

[Amy Rose]

Very beautiful, also nicely put together. Magnificent poem, you're a great poet. Keep it up Woody, I can't stop reading your poems. My favorite line was "Its quarter of lime in sequins" It has a great flow, you should definitely write more poems, congrats :)

[Woody]

thank you so much Dear. I'm super glad you liked it :)

[Mr_M]

Very profound imagery Woody. Fantastic poem

[Woody]

thank you my friend. I'm flattered as I consider myself an interloper. I'm a storyteller, not a poet contrary to what reviewers keep telling me :)

[Mr_M]

you should Beleive it...we all can't be wrong

[MoriartyMesa]

Reminds me of centuries ode, like the one's who guard the tombs of heroes.

[Woody]

thank you for stopping by and commenting, Moriarty.

[Valentine]

Night must be a lot prettier where you two are looking. All is black at night here. I hate even going outside..Valentine

[Woody]

oh dear! I hope you're not talking figuratively, Valentine. if however, the night is cloudy, tomorrow is another day.

[Angela Hunter]

Beautiful imagery; definitely a unique way of viewing the transition between night and day! I love the line "studded with diamond seeds"; it paints such an accurate picture.

[Woody]

oh my! I'll end up believing I am a real poet :) I'm much more comfortable with short stories and possibly humerous poems and limericks. thank you Dear.

[Angela Hunter]

I don't see any reason why you wouldn't be a real poet! And I find poetry is a good way to explore different techniques. :)

[Michael G.]

Excellent! This made me want to be there. Good work, sir.

[Woody]

thanks a million Michael. I rarely write "serious" stuff as one can tell from my other writes but I'm flattered when readers find them worthy of their time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is jazzy, rhythm's sound...this poem tiptoes into the senses and then sprays eloquence all over the field of thought.

[Woody]

my God, Jacob! even your reviews can be put in a book as they're never written lightly.
thank you so much. really humbled.

[Moonie]

Oh wow, I am blown away by this one. The simplicity with which you link the sentences is brilliant. It flows so smoothly and without any breaks. The rhythm and "all that jazz" is perfect. I have always loved short poems, and this sure is no exception. Forgive me for choosing my favourite lines, but I reckon, "Its quarter of lime in sequins" stands out! :)) Excellent!

[Woody]

and I am blown away by your review Mfd. thanks a lot. I'm not surprised you liked this. after all, you're the moon's daughter :)

[MsJewel]

The rhythm and rhyme are lovely...not at all forced...and the images you have created are stunning.
A beautiful poem!

:) Julie

[Woody]

thank you so much Julie. praise from a real poet means a lot.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

Very lovely. wonderful imagery

[Woody]

thank you Dear :)