Would You?

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If I shot my brains out and made a bloody mess right in front of you,

My blood swirling around your legs,

Creating a pool of pain and regret,

Would you even care?

 

Would you notice me if I slit my wrists,

And wore the scars as signs of the neglect I feel.

Would you notice those signs?

Would you love me if I let pills slide their poison down my throat?

Would you hug me if I died in your arms?

 

Or would you not care and walk away like you always do?
Would you look at me in disappointment?

And watch my dying body wither away?

Would you laugh at my pain?

Would you kick at what’s left of me?

Mommy,

Would you save me?

Reviews

[Susanna F]

Within the harsh and hurtful imagery and the accusatory questions, there is real emotion, real asking - why? This is painful to read, but chouts with emotion, which is what poetry is supposed to do. In the most difficult times of my life, it kept me sane. Keep writing, you have amazing talent.

[Bobworth F. Nilly]

if this is a love poem, i would tone it down a bit...... but if not, dont change a thing

[Distant horizons]

Sad and sorowful. Wonderfully written.