Shower scene

Rush of water full of noise
cascading, ricocheting, refracting

Wisps of vapor curling high
Blurring, obscuring, enveloping

Fresh clean scent of Ivory soap
Wafting, invigorating, enticing

Single translucent shower curtain
revealing, concealing, alluring

Sharp intake of breath escapes
unnoticed, uninhibited, desired

Author's Note

Gotta love the random things that come to mind =}

Reviews

[Broken Wings]

Lol thanks guys! And it wasn't meant to be rude!

[Eboy]

I don't know if calling me "eboy guy" is rude or what. But here I am. HAHA.

Anyways, I chose to read this poem because I thought there'd be something dirty within this. But thank the Lord there aren't. The depiction of a person showering is very beautiful. And I agree with the guy that reviewed this one first that the last stanza is neat, as it breaks the harmony of the poem.

Good job! :D

[L Lopez]

I think this is great. I like the repetitive structure. The change to the -ed ending was a smart way of closing the poem. It halts the flow created by the -ings and brings the reader to a stop. Cool.