something missing

i dont have terrible friends

despite our differences

we get each other

we are happy together

we all laugh together

yet even then

i feel 

as if

there's something missing

in their friendship

what's wrong

Reviews

[Ian Gilmour]

An honest piece but I was offset by one line: "in their friendship". Contextually, wouldn't it be "our friendship", or was this intentional as it means of saying that maybe, the friendship doesn't feel like your own and maybe that is what's wrong? It feels like they have a friend but maybe you don't? Funny how one word can change the meaning of 100 other and this poem does an excellent job at driving that point home. Well done.

[Ma'at]

I never though of it that way but yes, that can be how i meant it. But thank you very much

[Troy Henson]

I do enjoy your honesty in your writing. Friends can be difficult in the sense that yes sometimes something is missing. Just be yourself,

[Ma'at]

thank you very much

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooooo! keeping it real mr. robbers .. i love the way this short little piece tells a universal story .. for me .. in a fresh and new way .. we have deep needs that lead us on paths we may otherwise ignore .. how can we find any truths if we do not search for them .. and who has not experienced feeling so alone in a crowd .. and who has not discovered yet that we will be frustrated looking for completeness in a mate until we are first complete within ourselves .. nice one says i!
E.

[Ma'at]

thank you :)

[Laura Lynn]

maybe it's all the trees and the need for you to see and cherish the natural elements of the world, aside from people alone. the limited cause or purpose which draws you, each person wanting to spend their days in different ways, each to their own habitation or destinations, sometimes opposed destinations, beyond their choice personal choice in part, though we sometimes decide for ourselves certain directions, not all though it is a godsend to be able to make those choices alone. we are both interdependent and free and need to find the distance and proximity...behaviors bother at times...appearances...that is an almost subtle anger...too bad when someone finds us lacking...though we can not be everything for even one person in this earth, even when it feels that a person is that way for us sort of in some way, it's usually a combination of peoples and factors in truth, I know it to be the case, don't you agree, if you don't it's fine, it's never the complete story

[Matching Socks]

It's that thing you just can't put your finger on.
I know what you mean though...