untitled story (so far)

He stared back at her, his entire expression reflecting feelings of awe.

“I should go,” she said, turning to leave when she felt a strong hand latch onto her lower arm. She tilted her head around. The young man’s mysterious blue eyes were set on her desperately.

“What?” she said dazedly, slightly distracted by the intensity of his blue gaze.

“No,” he said simply. “Don’t. I need you. We all do.”

She was confused. Needed her? Who would need her? She had never felt needed all throughout her life. And she had definitely not expected such a handsome, ominous guy to be the first of it.

“I don’t understand,” was her reply.

“You will soon enough,” he said, almost wistfully. “There’s someone you must meet first. Someone important. Someone who will help you learn more.”

“Learn?” she said. “What is there to learn?” She had no clue on what he was going on about.

He put both hands on her shoulders and leaned closer to her. “All will be made clear to you soon. Do not worry.”

She stared up at his clear blue eyes. There was a certain truth and honesty in them that she could not ignore.

“Alright,” she agreed, not knowing what she was agreeing to.

He released her. “Wait here,” he ordered calmly. “Please, do not leave.” She could here the raw desperation in his voice, numbing her. “You are needed.”

For the first time, she thought.

He left the room swiftly and closed the door with a soft clap.The room suddenly felt emptier without his presence. She took this time to process what she had seen.

The young, handsome detective’s assistant that had captured her attention and made her acquaintance had a certain ring almost to him that was eye-catching. The way he had spoke to her was something she had never heard or seen before…it was almost as if he had known her all her life, and was just waiting to be reunited with her, but in a confusing incident she still did not comprehend.

The creaky swing of a door aroused her from her train of thought. The young man had returned, with another young man she did not recognize. He left the door slightly ajar behind him, and came quickly to her.

She crossed her arms carefully across her chest and her eyes followed the second young man. He was extremely tall, clothed in all black. He had thick raven black hair and dark brown eyes. She found him very attractive.

He stared back at her curiously, but did not speak.

She eyed him, trying to sense any confusion or knowledge amongst his expression. She found none.

“This is Daniel,” the blonde assitant detective said. “He shall help you.”

She and Daniel locked eyes for a long moment, trying to make out what the other one was thinking. The blonde detective coughed, and the silence was broken. 

“I am Christopher,” he announced. “And I will tell you both what you need to know. But you must have patience. Do not force anything upon yourselves you may regret, and limit outside connections and distractions. This must be kept under secrecy, or else it will fail. You will fail if there is anyone else aware of what is happening. Everything will be made clear to you soon enough.”

“Soon? When is soon?” Daniel asked irritably.

Christopher turned to look at him, giving him a look that made her think that they share knowledge that she did not know.

“Like I said, I will tell you whenever I know more.” Christopher said. 

Daniel stuck his hands in his pockets and gazed around, walking closer to her casually. 

“Now leave,” Christopher said. “I will let you know soon.” There was a worried look in his deep blue eyes that made her concerned. She clutched his arm to grab his attention. He immediately looked into her eyes for a moment, and then swerved to the door and opened it for them to go. She turned around to look at Daniel and he swept his hand dramatically, gesturing for her to go through first. She cocked her head and decided she liked Daniel. She walked through the door at a fast pace, nodding to Christopher in acknowledgement of their discussion, and soon was out into the day.

As she walked into the bright sunset, she heard footsteps pacing behind her. She swiveled around and was shocked to see Daniel following her. 

“What are you doing?” she asked.

“What do you think?” he retorted.

“I don’t think anything,” she replied indignantly. 

He sighed. “Sorry. I just followed you cause I wanted to talk to you.” He brushed his hair through his hair a few times and gazed at her expectantly. 

She stared at him stupidly for a few moments before realizing what he just said. 

“Okay,” she said cautiously and slowly. “I suppose you can tag along.”

The sudden joy that lit up on his face and in his eyes was quite adorable. She could detect a lilt of an Irish accent when he said, “Thank you, love.”

She instantaneously forgot all anger and confusion she had had only a few minutes before. 

Author's Note

this is a work-in-progress my friend and I are working on together. since she doesnt have a wc, i've decided to post the first scene i wrote for it. if she ends up joining here, she'll post hers. i know i cant post hers since i did not write them, so i will just be posting a few scenes that i've written for the story.

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

The detail and volume of vocabulary you incorporated in this short sample of a story is amazing! That's something very important that you keep using different adjectives even when explaining the same thing. If you post more of this I'd happily review it for you!
As far as the story content goes it's catching and creates a lot of positive questions about the plot.
Some advice since your doing a combined write with your friend, make sure you edit each others parts to make sure you have the least amount of mistakes both of you can find! It often helps to have others look at it too.
Well done! :)

[Ma'at]

i'll definitely post more of it later! and thank you for that advice, i'll let her know about it! thank you :) x

[Lotus Flower]

Love the suspense and detail, keep going! :)

[Ma'at]

thank you so much! x