Met

Mya meeting the current girlfriend

“Hey. I’m not sure if you know who I am, but I’m that girl Alex was with. I’m sorry things got out of hand tonight.”

“It’s cool.”

“No, I let my teenage hormones get the better of me. I didn’t mean to make a bad impression on you especially since we’ve never met.”

“Seriously, it’s all good.”

“You sure?”

“Yeah.”

Figures. She has to be sweet too. There’s nothing to hate her for. B***h.

“Listen, Alex, bad mouths his xs A LOT, but I’ve never heard anything bad about you, until tonight. He won’t even tell me why you guys broke up.”

“Okay?”

“I’m just saying. I think from that you seem like a nice girl.”

“Thanks.”

“You okay?”

“No . . .”

“I can understand that.”

“Yeah.”

“Listen, I was wondering if you had any tips on Alex. He’s different than most guys.”

“That’s what I thought.”

“Well, I mean, he’s more reserved than guys I’ve dated even met. Anything that might break the ice?”

“My way was stripping for him.”

“Yeah-I don’t do that.”

“Then just bring up something random.”

“Okay. Thanks”

“Sure.”

“Hey, um, can I ask you questions like this? I mean, like not now or all the time, just when I’m not sure what to do about him?”

I really didn’t want to, but I wanted to make Alex happy. And if this was how I can do that without forcing my way into involving myself, I guess I have to do it.

“Sure.”

“Cool thanks! I promise I won’t ask a lot of them or anything I think might hurt you!”

“Okay.”

Most people would never understand why I agreed to this, but I did and I know that in the long run it’ll be worth the present pain . . . I think . . .

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and you manage to tell the story, but you really ought to include a bit more exposition here. As it stands this is literally all dialogue, which can work in a very short piece, but since this is part of a larger work, it makes it feel very disjointed and unbalanced.