Return love to me

A break up poem

Dark imprints of my sadness
shadowy flecks across my heart
once filled with happiness
until you broke it apart

Once overflowing with love,
misery now fills my cup
a mixture of pain and tears
I need love to fill it up.

I can see our bedroom silhouettes
soft prints where you used to lay
you nestled against my breast
as we whispered the night away.

Missing you is hurting me
And breaking my heart in two
You took away my fantasy
Now bring back all I gave to you.

Bring it back, give it back to me
Embrace me with in your arms again
All I want is what you took from me
Your tender love, minus the pain.

Reviews

[GTVile]

Ah, a rhyming poem. I'm afraid I just don't see enough of these nowadays. I love it. You paid attention to rhyme and didn't force it, and you gave it rhythmic flow. Very nice. I do think, however, that the last line could be arranged a bit differently, maybe "without" instead of "minus" but that's a personal preference. Overall, very, very good.

Such a deep and powerful poem full of tender love.
I feel the loss you bring so well over, in this piece.
Very well written.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A beautiful poem you have written . Emotional and passionate.
Asking for what you gave to be brought back, i can feel that..
Sad beauty.

Chloe

[EMMIE]

IT'S BEEN A WHILE SINCE I'VE READ A LOVE POEM, BUT I HAVE TO SAY THIS HAS TO BE ONE OF THE BEST SO FAR. SO MUCH HEART AND EMOTIONS IN THIS. ALL I WANT TO DO IS SNAP MY FINGER *SNAP SNAP* THIS IS SPOKEN WORD MATERIAL!

[Helen Crutchett]

Beautifully penned. Sweet sentiments flowing throughout. A magic read.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most talented and almost crying prose. It reveals a taste for old world poetry, a most refreshing piece, well done, good read.

[Thug Life]

raw with the pain! i luv it! luv the flow and even the pic u chose went great along with the story u told.. great write!

[Dilan Gray]

This poem is beautiful. You wrote it so well and showed the all the pain. You created great images and feelings with your words. I really like this poem! 100!

[lovejulez03]

This poem is so delightfully simple that he reminded me of so many things and people in my life. The way that you brought it together was great. My favorite line is "All I want is what you took from me, your tender love minus the pain." Very moving. I think the rhyming is beautiful. This is well written

[Everett DeValle]

This poem is pure beauty...just bring it back to her! lol

A delightful read.