Return love to me

A break up poem

Dark imprints of my sadness
shadowy flecks across my heart
once filled with happiness
until you broke it apart

Once overflowing with love,
misery now fills my cup
a mixture of pain and tears
I need love to fill it up.

I can see our bedroom silhouettes
soft prints where you used to lay
you nestled against my breast
as we whispered the night away.

Missing you is hurting me
And breaking my heart in two
You took away my fantasy
Now bring back all I gave to you.

Bring it back, give it back to me
Embrace me with in your arms again
All I want is what you took from me
Your tender love, minus the pain.

Reviews

[GTVile]

Ah, a rhyming poem. I'm afraid I just don't see enough of these nowadays. I love it. You paid attention to rhyme and didn't force it, and you gave it rhythmic flow. Very nice. I do think, however, that the last line could be arranged a bit differently, maybe "without" instead of "minus" but that's a personal preference. Overall, very, very good.

[Papaya]

Lovely! Flowed superbly too.

[JenniferMarie]

This is beautiful and I can relate to this emotion.

My favorite stanza:

"I can see our bedroom silhouettes
soft prints where you used to lay
you nestled against my breast
as we whispered the night away."

They were all nice though.

[Ivory]

Wow i love this piece.. Brings me back to when I first arrived at Cafe and I was mourning the loss of love.. Very powerful : )

[The Watcher]

This is quite touching, and I can understand the pain you must be going through... Nonetheless, beautiful poem and kudos!

100/100

[EmpressPoetess]

I'm honored, thank you, Silent_ Watcher!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

I loved this! The flow and pain a beautiful flowing story of loves fallen petals. Beautifully, captivated in grace.

[EmpressPoetess]

Thank you, Melody!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you! I read so much more than anyone thinks on here...few move me to post a review.

[Brittany]

I enjoyed the rhyme and flow of this piece. I llike the message and pain and hope it evoked in my heart. Bittersweet and I think the picture really added to the presentation. Well done.

[EmpressPoetess]

Thank you so very much. Yes, no matter how much pain, there is still hope deep down.

[Muse]

ache...what a melodic..beautiful...and painful write. Why is it that hurt and love inspire the best poetry? Is it because...at some point in time...we have all been there maybe? Any way you slice it...it's lovely penning.

Muse

[EmpressPoetess]

Muse, I wish I could answer your question, but pain seems to unhinge the best of our creativity. Thank you for your warm review.

[Laura S.]

Truly enjoyed reading this from the first verse to the last. Love how releable, deep and passionate this poem is. Well done!

[BLACK PRINCE]

We all can miss so much
the ones with whom we shared
our intimate moments and our intimate private parts.
Sadly ( sometimes)
these are the people that hurt us the most.

It's up to us to move on
or work hard for the love
and bond to remain strong.

[Graggz]

its amazing how much this poem defines love