Unbridled passion

 

   Oh! But to melt into this delirious plight

In your arms, on this blue moon night

    Lips so soft to envy the ripeness of a peach

But a breath’s width away, so near your reach

                                      (~)

Tend this soft flesh with fingers of deep care

Lose thy fingers within the lushness of my hair

Lay me down within the splendor of the grass

Touch me tenderly with your gentle caress

                          (~)

Embrace me; pull me into the nearness of you

   Whisper softly of what our love does imbue

Intensity flashes of yearning in jade green eyes

   I tremble, I gasp, lost in love with deep sighs

                                   (~)

           But to kiss you into dawn’s warm light

Within this passion found upon a star filled night

           Your happiness is my utmost pleasure

The joy felt in your embrace, there is no measure

                    (~)

Tis a reality thy self longs for so rapturously

A perfect match made between you and me

Join mouth to mouth, soul to soul, and heart to heart
And seal our love, which no man should put apart

Reviews

[Jibey]

This is a very charming romantic piece of writing, with a slightly Elizabethan feeling about the style...

'Tend this soft flesh with the fingers of deep care' - nice way of putting it. The line 'The joy felt in your embrace, there is no measure' seemed a bit awkward; like the last line, there is a roughness in the rhythm. But that's poetry - and you would find plenty of precedents in the finest writers for jarring the reader a bit as the words and ideas tumble out.

The passion is unmistakable, that's the thing. I enjoyed it.

[Rita MacGumerait]

This reminds me of a classic because it's just so simple and elegant to me. I really enjoyed it. It was very romantic.

[Periac]

beautifully composed...a passionate plea....

[Masq]

Excellent write! I loved every line.......though I'm not surprised. I especially loved the last stanza.


"Tis a reality thy self longs for so rapturouslyA perfect match made between you and meJoin mouth to mouth, soul to soul, and heart to heart
And seal our love, which no man should put apart"


You continue to grow in your craft and it is very evident in each new masterpiece that you create!

[Hannah Monttkomepy]

This kinda reminded me of something Shakespeare would write. You could really feel the passion in this poem and it contributed to make this poem very beautiful and lovely. I loved it.

[Michael X]

stunning and beautiful, a poetess of romantic's dream of love surrendered with passion from the soul,
your words combine with metaphorical perfection to set the readers heart adrift, floating upon
sweet nothings meant to bring about a rapture in silence, when overshadowed by the whispered tone
of desire. surely the stars come out when reading this divine love poem, masterfully invented.

[Jade_Phenomenal]

Embrace me; pull me into the nearness of you
Whisper softly of what our love does imbue
Intensity flashes of yearning in jade green eyes
I tremble, I gasp, lost in love with deep sighs

So romanticly sensual.....I love it!!!

[Joe]

I like how it's wasn't too risque, nor bland. Good job.