All Because Of You

Listen to the breath of my heart

The beat of my soul

It’s all for you,

You’ve turned me gold.

 

My soul no longer echoes.

Eyes no longer rain.

Cause of you I’ve stepped

Out of the shade.

 

My mind no longer hates

My lips no longer curse.

All because of you,

All because of you!

Life no longer hurts.

 

 

Author's Note

Not my best work but it was what I was feeling at the moment.

Reviews

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

Subtle yet poignant and sharp like a small blade.
For some reason it picked up pace from the second stanza
onwards and the second stanza stands out in an impressive way.
Reading your words you can almost feel the beat of someone's heart and the breath of someone in the reader's arms.

[Ruth]

This is lovely:) Beautifully capturing the emotions:) xx

[Chris Lotus]

Expressing on the spot through the pen usually brings about a delicate and solid piece. This one is no stranger to the many other pieces that are written in the same manner. Great work!

[Daniel Gardner]

That is what makes this a good work. The fact that you felt it makes and helps the reader to feel it as well. Great job.

[Emily]

This is a really pretty piece. i like the analogies you've used in this, they are not the stereotypical analogies which are used, so the variation is quite well appreciated. I like the lines about coming out of the shade.

nice work!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was adorable. Great write. Keep up the good work. I love your writing. I think it is amazing. I can relate to this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Sofia N]

By the way for some reason, some of the best poems we write are the ones that express how we are feeling at the moment and come straight from the heart. Good job :)

[Sofia N]

aww I really love this one..Even though is short..you said a lot in a few..I love it..great write ;)

[Manda]

it was nice and short. good job

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a very good poem. The flow and story was excellent. It was a poem of love and being thankful. I believe this poem is outstanding. A complete poem from a loving heart.
Coyote

[Michael X]

interesting piece from your usual cut-throat and hardcore style of rave. you have such a passionate voice. you are surely shaping your words into artistry jennifer. the form is awsome. not enough flair for me but, i loved it.