prince charming

Wherefore canst love be?

We hark so fain

Overmany words I sing for thee

Reminding thee thither nary vain

 

Thou that cometh from above

I tarry eke thy eyes

These days I beseech of love

Thou art my love, I’ll never say good-bye

 

My heart dearth to feel

Forever love I shall

Thou art one to heal

This pudh pain shall never again fall

 

Naught shall take thee away

I shall be hither for thee everyday

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Well, you've managed to use the Shakespearean language correctly, and it does work in this piece, but I'd just be very cautious with its use in the future. If you don't do it right it can come off as horribly dated and pastiche, which is never a good thing. This piece, though, is not that bad, although the topic is a little generic, but you've still written it well.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thank you for telling me that I will remember it and thanks for the review :)

[beautiful dreamer]

i finally understand your writing!! it took forever but i get the old english now! great poem girl!

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thanks I wrote this one for dillion and I did it for my english class it's due tomorrow hopefully I get a good grade on it :D

[beautiful dreamer]

i think you will. i haven't had to do poems in my english class yet but i hated it last year because she made me change them and it just didn't sound like my writing anymore.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

awes

[beautiful dreamer]

i didn't like that class. that was the first english class i got a b in.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

o im sorry

[beautiful dreamer]

eh its in the past now. i have all A+ right now so we're alll good

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

sweet