Counting down

I’m counting down

Every minute that’s left

For a love that’s not around

For every feeling that wasn’t felt

For every little sound

 

Not a moment to waste

I’ll hold back those tears

Give you a little taste

All the lies that you showed no fear

Your love was a waste

 

Now I’m sick of your love

Sick of the lies

Sick of looking above

So I count down for you to die

You have nothing left to prove

 

You’re nothing more to me

Just a remainder of the past

So shall not believe

No more of that test

I’m done of you making fool out of me

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest and direct tone in the poem. Come a time when we must request a separation. I like the ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Moon]

Absolutely wonderful ! Thank you for sharing .

[Faffy]

i loved this, like properly loved this it was spectacularly powerful! your words had me by the neck but i felt the power and emotion was interrupted by the last line it didnt have that kick i was expecting because you built it up so well as a criticism i would make the finality at the end more prominent and bigger, but thats just me =) it is still a fantastic write nonetheless. you become more talented everyday =)

-roshan

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thank you so much

[erica]

amazing...you are very talented keep it up...:)

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thank :D

[erica]

thanks* lol. welcome my dear.

[Writer *78*]

Very nice work yet again.

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thanks :D

[martinlutherking]

I love this, well done

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thanks

[C.C. Marx]

Wow what a slap in the face to whomever this is about.....would not want to be them right now sheesh, anyways great job on portraying the powerful emotion as clearly as you did :)

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

:D

[Victoria Elizabeth]

good job! keep it up!!

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thank you so much :D

[Victoria Elizabeth]

your very welcome, i love writers like you, you write pure emotion! Not about stupid things! keep it up!!!

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

:D of couse I will, I just love writing so much... I don't know what I'll do without it :D

[ℰmerald ⚓]

wow, WOW!
can we all just
just. :'D

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

:3 thank you

[ℰmerald ⚓]

your very welcome c:

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

^^

[unshakenScene]

this is really good:)

[Janice Fronek(red.panda)]

thank you ^^