blood

I try to make it through this hell of a  life I was given, everywhere I look there is pain, my soul is bleeding out. The pain can’t hide their pain anymorw, they see what they have caused others.

 

            Broken hearts are dust in the wind, blood rain down from the skies I can hear a  voice calling me from the shadows, telling me not to fear, it can take everything away with a single drop of blood.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jaded Mermaid]

Your name for yourself is correct, "poems with feeling." :) I took from this everything your probably wanted to be discovered. Anguish, but yet treasures of life. It teaches us as the readers to acknowledge who we are just as that, what we become from our sorrows. I know underlying, it must somehow be about cutting, and I really do not want you to ever go towards that path even if I'm just a random internet stranger to you, but take it from someone who's been there in places and still goes through it most days, it is never worth it once the first drop of what you bled dries over, that's how the tingle of addiction bites into you for cravings. You on your own have to realize what a strong and courageous person you are in standing. You can battle your way out of any hell hole as long as you keep on fighting with a clear sight on goals.

[Chaos_Collector]

"The pain can’t hide their pain anymorw" I think you meant anymore. Anyway, there's a lot of feeling in this poem. I loved this part here " Broken hearts are dust in the wind, blood rain down from the skies I can hear a voice calling me from the shadows, telling me not to fear, it can take everything away with a single drop of blood." Such powerful diction there. Very nice work.

Chaos_Collector

[poems with feeling]

that ithink all of my work is good u dont know y u just do

[Chaos_Collector]

I'm not sure I understand. your comment. Can you write clearer?

[poems with feeling]

i think all of my work is good u souldread the one that was a pic of me it rlt poweful

[Chaos_Collector]

Thanks and sure :)

[poems with feeling]

ok see u there

[Death Girl]

I am sorry that you have to see a lot of pain. This has good feeling to it. I hope liofe gets better for you.

[poems with feeling]

it has its days likw ever one esle

[Patrick Henry]

You are a beautiful sponge of emotive prowess. You will see and examine these foul parts of OTHER'S realities, but experience of age will only teach you how to put it into perspective, so as not to trouble your faith and fear in directions you are not suited for. Hearing others say "Grow up" means that they have little to offer in telling YOU how they managed to do this, and if they ARE able, it is a lonely story of missed childhoods, fears brought on by other people who couldn't manage their own, and they also may envy how "together" you appear...... all the while, little do YOU recognize, is that you are in the midst of forming your OWN perspective right before your eyes and you don't even know it yet!! 8HUGZ* ....Huge hugs!!! xoxo -Mark

[Patrick Henry]

Well said. lol Stop stopping by..... no one notices.

[Call Me Blu]

This is really full of feeling and imagery. I love it. It's really good and creates a nice story.

[stars are far]

love it a lot ...
it gave me a nice feeling inside ..
really great .

[Hello, Goodbye]

i love the short and concise.. direct to the point is my preference.. love your work..

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

great imagery great structure and font what can I say your truly talented and I can't wait to read more of your work thank you for sharing this piece

100/100

[Ashley Myers]

Even better than before!!! awesome job

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Holy s**t thats deep.... You have spoken so many things with so little words, this is an awesome pice and it screams with the hurt and torment you must be going through, Great Job!