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your tired of the way i blame you

your tired of how i'm always mad at you

your tired of me being dramatic

your tired of how i scream, yell, shout

your tired of me hating you

your tired of how i cry out for help

 

I'm tired of how i act towards you.

i'm tired of you thinking its always you

i'm tired how you tell me stop being dramatic.

i'm tired of you saying i hate you

i'm tired of all the yelling, screaming, and shouting

i'm tired of me starting it all.

 

i'm asking for help just this one time

let me move out.

so i can clear my head.

get back in my safe zone.

let me get better.

let me grow stronger.

please.

 

Reviews

[Markymark]

Good emotion and passion. The first stanza should read You're versus your, and in the second stanza all the I'm's should be capatalized as each is an individual sentence. Minor punctuation corrections that will make the piece pop and shine......Great feeling in this piece that many can relate to...I'm sure.

MM

[Starting Over]

This was powerful and yeah sometime we do need some spase to realize how much we really love someone!

[Jason]

Great emotion and passion in this work. I really like the message that is delivered here. Thank you for sharing. :)

[joseph enthusiasm]

It was great, subtle but demanding attention at the same time.

[.]

Time is all that you need ..

"let me get better.
let me grow stronger.
please."

[Katherine Wyatt]

The need for space.. boy perspective is everything.. well done.. fasciinating form!

[Vincent A. Beasley]

Is it about a love or parents? It's really good! Very forceful but so loving at the same time. Even after all that, you care enough to work things out =]

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW !!!
very very forceful yet so polite ha !!!
Hope it all works out in the end for you !!!
A Good Piece Indeed !!!