Love the way you describe this person with “qualities” instead of “physical characteristics” . . . to me, this is a much deeper way to see another person. Your message takes an unexpected turn toward the end, but a twist that is familiar to me. At my old age, I’m only observing becuz I can’t take anymore disappointments/hurts. I love that your narrator is being realistic without a self-pitying tone (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
A nice piece of creative writing, Cat. You are describing a universal experience; everybody goes through it as a teenager. You have evoked it very well. Your poem is descriptive, well conceived and enjoyable. Well done.
I liked your poem! I enjoyed how you described the person, and your love for them just to have it destroyed at the end. It holds endless emotion with unrequited love. Keep up the good work.
Nicely done. I imagined you having a cup of coffee and seeing him across the street with another. Observation, not stalking. Nothing to worry about lol. I enjoyed the read.
This one just came to me, and I thought I should share with y'all b/c today,4-26-2018, is Poem in your Pocket day.
I hope that y'all like this, and give me some feedback, both good and bad.
Alternative, shy, loves music.
I typically keep to myself, and am not very expressive.
But when I write, it's like I'm some place else.
I've been gone for a while, and I'm working on getting back.. more..