Observer, not Pursuer

Observer, not Pursuer

A Poem by Wonderland Asylum

Your smile is so captivating.

So sweet, yet with a pinch of mischievousness.

The touch of your hands,

Gentle yet strong.

The sound of your voice, sincere, calming,

inviting, sweet, yet firm.

And eyes that tell a story.

What kind, I have yet to read.

Haven’t gotten close enough.

Not one to approach.

Observing you, from a distance,

able to see your interest

in  someone else.

Disappointment rising,

too late once again.

© 2018 Wonderland Asylum


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Love the way you describe this person with “qualities” instead of “physical characteristics” . . . to me, this is a much deeper way to see another person. Your message takes an unexpected turn toward the end, but a twist that is familiar to me. At my old age, I’m only observing becuz I can’t take anymore disappointments/hurts. I love that your narrator is being realistic without a self-pitying tone (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Years Ago


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A nice piece of creative writing, Cat. You are describing a universal experience; everybody goes through it as a teenager. You have evoked it very well. Your poem is descriptive, well conceived and enjoyable. Well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Amy
I liked your poem! I enjoyed how you described the person, and your love for them just to have it destroyed at the end. It holds endless emotion with unrequited love. Keep up the good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely done. I imagined you having a cup of coffee and seeing him across the street with another. Observation, not stalking. Nothing to worry about lol. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it is something creatively written nice message too

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tough luck i guess,liked it

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

What a observation I want to meet them as well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What the hell is 'poem in your pocket' day?

Also, it sounds like you might be a serial killer in training.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderland Asylum

6 Years Ago

Lol.
April is Poetry moth, and the 26th is national Poem In Your Pocket Day.
Wonderland Asylum

6 Years Ago

And maybe I am in training, I can't confirm or deny it.
Emo, a smile can be beguiling, and while we stand there mesmerized, debating the next move, another steps in and steals them away.

A good write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one just came to me, and I thought I should share with y'all b/c today,4-26-2018, is Poem in your Pocket day.
I hope that y'all like this, and give me some feedback, both good and bad.


Posted 6 Years Ago



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Wonderland Asylum
Wonderland Asylum

Reedley, CA



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Alternative, shy, loves music. I typically keep to myself, and am not very expressive. But when I write, it's like I'm some place else. I've been gone for a while, and I'm working on getting back.. more..

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