OverThrown

Feelings came over me like a

storm for you.

Haven’t felt this storm in

A few years now.

Wanted to get close to you

but stuck viewing and admiring from afar.

Thought you had felt something

As well.

Why else would you have started

talking to me?

Unless, of course, your intentions

were impure.  Simply moving from one subject to another.

Thought that this would actually

become something Great.

Unfortunately you had Different plans.

Told me things I didn’t realize I Wanted to hear.

The way you Held me, I felt so

Safe, so Secure.

Your Actions covered up your Thoughts.

Made me feel like a Girl Who Was Wanted .

Caused me, who used to be such a Queen, who

Didn’t Need a King,

Caused my Own heart,

to be

OverThrown.

Reviews

[C. Lee Battaglia]

"Your Actions covered up your Thoughts.
Made me feel like a Girl Who Was Wanted .
Caused me, who used to be such a Queen, who
Didn’t Need a King,
Caused my Own heart,
to be
OverThrown."

This was a very heartfelt poem! It was so relatable! I love your writing style. It's unique and it hooks the reader start to finish! You have a talent and it should be shared with everyone! You are one of the best writers that I've come across on this sight! keep up the incredible work!

Your friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[Wonderland Asylum]

C. Lee Battaglia, thank-you so much!
It means a lot to me when you say that I'm one of the best writers that you've come across. In my own eyes, I'm a mere amature at writing, so your kind words are very much appreciated!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I really meant it! You are very welcome! And thanks once again for your incredible poetry!

[Alao Taiwo]

so hearty. u almost embarrassed me with that degree of naivete and heartfelt-ness. i'm broken

[Alessander]

I sorta feel this is the core of the person

Unless, of course, your intentions

were impure.

The way you Held me, I felt so

Safe, so Secure.

It even rhymes, which signals in my head, that it's related.

Could you imagine, how one would feel, "you're so safe and secure...but impure"

That would be a mindfuck, for sure

I like the rawness to this. There are no queens, or kings

only pimps and w****s

[Wonderland Asylum]

The majority of my work is based on my personal experiences, they all have a raw or genuine feeling.
I write exactly what is in my head, with little to no changes to them, unless the piece is very long.
Thanks for the review.

[Alessander]

I understand. I liked this most from your poems.

[Jeremy]

This was good. Your feelings of longing and young betrayal shine through very well. It gives the sense of youth and the sometimes overpowering emotions that you don't realize until later in life were pretty trivial. Well done, thanks for sharing!

[EJ's Horror]

It's sad and beautiful, Emo Cat. Was this based on a personal experience?

[Wonderland Asylum]

EJH Horror, yes, this poem is actually based off of a personal experience, but one that happened months ago.

[A.Tarek]

I am not so into poetry but from time to time, I read some.. that was amazing, well chosen title too
I enjoyed it

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

I live the reference to the storm the raging passion within- what a wonderful feeling- nothing better- but sometimes we expect too much before we even know where things are going and disappoint ourselves and then there are those who give us false hopes as they are lost themselves- rejection can be a blessing in disguise- plenty fish in the sea rather wait for right one- love the words u used🌹

[Pete]

good job. cleverly compelling thoughts. we follow our hearts but must be careful. things aren't always as they appear on the surface but deep down the heart always knows. never easy but all's fair in love and war ...

[barleygirl]

Many times I find love poems leap to an advanced point in the situation too quickly for my liking. What I loved about reading your poem is the way you crafted a gradual approach with no jolts, your words like a graceful cat approaching the desired culmination of your message. Many times I'm not a fan of using capitalization for emphasis, but the way you did it works well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lavi]

Complex feelings, thoughts, and emotions are written here. It's like temptation is warring with caution and desire with questions unanswered - perhaps reluctant of it? Probably shouldn't make this comparison but the ending, beginning with the reference to the Queen reminds me of Cleopatra's story about her kingdom being overthrown by her love. Reason I bring it up though is for the caution has a place but how far you believe it is necessary is up to you. The heart and the mind, an amazing thing to listen to.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story in the poem my friend. Sweetness and temptation can brake down walls of safety. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote